All A Game

Sonnet

 

 

Summer, and the night was blacken by clouds
sneaking smoothly over the sleek full moon
 I, by your slight of hand, was fooled like a child
Lies shot straight to my heart, a mortal wound

And oh,what tales you told, brought joy my way
my heart beat glad a thousand times, not less
but was all for naught, a fraudulent play
A keen magician's plot, exit stage left

Yes, a folly, jolly well you have played
and fool was I, so well to play my part
this trick-card game of love,Queens,Jacks and Spades
you mastered well shattering dreams and hearts

Yes, a player right from the very start
All A Game,and your prize,~ my broken heart

 

Reviews

[Melinda]

This piece flowed soo smoothly.. one line into another without losing the meaning of each.. I think it also described very accurately the way one feels when they're betrayed by someone they love, and trust.. Personally I believe that trust is a lot harder to form with someone, than a form of love.. and so when it's damaged, betrayed, broken.. the pain one feels in that first moment is immense, so much so that it's hard to imagine you'll ever trust anyone, or be happy again.. This is a very well written piece.. I enjoyed reading it a lot :)

[zaneybear]

this piece flowed so smoothly, i honestly had to read it twice to realize it rhymed, which is very good because it's not forced, well done, keep writing:)

[Life Calling!!!]

Beautiful Fran...this is such smoothly flowing piece...I agree with Lyder as to how each line runs into the next as if in continuum, without losing meaning. And the emotion portrayed is so honest as well...I loved the piece!

I'd just like a clarification....was "...blacken by clouds" meant to be as it is, or have you by mistake left out the 'ed'....as in should it have been 'blacken' or 'blackened'. Just look into it!

Nonetheless, its a very well done piece! Thanks!

God Bless!

[Catastrophe]

i admire the way you have written this poem,
the last 4 lines really get to me; i can relate i should say
and that's the beauty of poetry. I really like it.

[Stacey]

This....is wonderful. I love how it has a pattern but it doesn't sound typical, boring or simple like many poems with couplets do. I will definitely read more of your poems :]

[Rain]

I agree with David. I wish I knew how much is reality and how much is writer's imagination. This piece seems to have too much regret, anger, embarrassment to be fiction. I usually just read, and if I feel something, I like it. I don't go too far out of my way to find the writers intent. But, this was so powerful, it felt like an online player. What ever it was, it is a great write. Rain..

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

It's been a spell since I rad one of your pieces but as per usual they are fantastic. To those of you who do not know the Great Fran Marie....she is a master poet amongst masters.

Talk later.

Dave

[Brianna Brie]

Yes, a folly, jolly well you have played
and fool was I, so well to play my part
this trick-card game of love,Queens,Jacks and Spades
you mastered well shattering dreams and hearts

Yes, a player right from the very start
All A Game,and your prize,~ my broken heart

Wow, this is awesome. Loved it every last word.

[HoWiE]

Yeh, this was very cool. Well, cool from a literary sense, at least! How unusual it is for some guy to swing in, sweep a girl off her feet with his bullshit, bed her, take what he wants and then walk away leaving tragedy and sadness in his wake. I won't lie, I have been guilty of these sort of things in the past - but now, I think, I am a reformed character - I have grown up, thank God. A really well written piece of work and exactly the sort of thing I am looking for, thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
Cheers! HoWiE

[doreen cyr]

awesome write very vivid emotions
doreen