DaRk CRimson BLooD

 

` Dark Crimson Blood `

 

My heart and soul
doth dwell in dark secret love
yes, a deadly affair stained in
dark crimson blood

'twas no victory won,
as vaults of heaven cried
my hand still frozen to the gun
as my lover's cold blood did run
in leaden rain drops died.

yet, no remorse had i
nor heavy heart to bare
and left him bleeding there
near fresh dug graves nearby.

the graveyard winds blew brisk
that dark, dreary, night
and the rain that fell
was marked by hell
as i ran in shivering fright

a bullet between his eyes
kept running thru~my mind
he had sworn in the name of
the Gods of Love ,he would
right our love and he'd be mine.

but his promises stood empty,
he would not leave his wife
now crimson blood runs down
his cheeks,and curls 'round
blue lips,oh, cruel, love unkind.

a dark sinister love so deep
and intense, such was ours,
hidden in a denizen of darkness,
clandestine~backstreet bars.

on dim-lit corners,stealing a kiss
in alley ways to embrace
no disgrace,nor shame,
always in rain,
the same sneaking game
a love without any stars.

'hell hath no fury like....
so i would murder him again
and put the bullet in thrice
and not think twice in my head
'Alas my dark secret love
lies in dark crimson blood
yes, cruel love so dead.

Reviews

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

I had to read the piece that beat out, "Scream for Ice cream" for third place in this contest. I can now see why, this is a fabulous piece and contains tons of visuals for something scribed one page in length. I think Scream may have been too long for this contest but with pieces like this running against it I'll have to do better than psychotic canabilistic clown to gross out the moderater.

Loved this. Reading it was like being in a laser light show, appealing to the ear and eye.

Dave

This is a really good piece,so well put together,such a morbid dark little story,A good way to start my morning,thanks.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A cruel tale indeed - unnerving and intense. Nice work. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[George Love]

Wow! Very good work on this peice! Well done!

[NJ Schneider]

This was an amazing poem. I loved every verse, but it didn't follow the guild lines of what I wanted for the contest. Still an awesome work!

[Mel Stevens]

As I first began reading the poem, I believed it to be a 'lover's quarrel' gone bad, in the heat of the moment type killing. But at the end, when she states she would kill him again and not think twice about it, it makes you think...Is it heat of the moment, or could she be cold blooded enough to kill with no compassion? I love it.

[Nyida Strong]

This is like a fine perfume. Soft and seductive, yet peel back the layers and theres a whiff of raw, feline power. Well done!

N. Strong

[nokturnal]

This is a great read the emotions of the girl and how she yearned to be his one and only really comes out in your words.

[Singlemindedly]

What a stark, emotional poem... saddening to read. Powerful work, Fran Marie!

[Dawnkain]

Absolutely morbid, heartbreaking infuriating and linguring! I love it! Definately dark. Awsome work girl!