DeadLy DReam

`` Deadly Dream``
 

In slumber came a dream so real  A midnight fog, most dead I feel Depths of hell bode, a dream so real My soul to steal, My soul to steal Dark Shadows deep, within my dream Entombed my mind, so it would seem Could not escape this deadly scene I tried to scream! I could not scream! I sought relief, but could not rest My spirit sealed,My soul possessed Retrieve my peace!, I do protest! I did my best, I did my best. Deep, Deeper, Down! My spirit bent in dark despair, of Hell's descent Inferno's pit, of no repent 'Twas no relent, 'Twas no relent!

 

Reviews

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Great poem! The lines had a good rythem to it. The font worked well for the your poem. It had some vivid images.

[Dawnkain]

had a few of those. good write, darkness becomes you...

[musegirlsm]

Great write! The font you chose compliments the era one thinks about when reading this.

I love this mood you are in!

sandra

[Phil Sanders]

Superbly written and congratulations ....

[Marie]

NIcely written.

[Azizi- - !!]

I absolutly adore the ryhming.
Excitingly dark piece.
Good write.
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[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Good write. Thank you for sharing. debileah

[Illegitimate Artist]

I stumbled at first with the set up but once I'd got the drift of it I really fell in love with the way it was written. It really flows together nicely and gives it a nice rythem as well as imagery. Nice work.

[doreen cyr]

awesome and frightening. very strong emotions

[Deborah Shepard]

beauty the write is soothing loved it