DeadLy DReam

`` Deadly Dream``
 

In slumber came a dream so real  A midnight fog, most dead I feel Depths of hell bode, a dream so real My soul to steal, My soul to steal Dark Shadows deep, within my dream Entombed my mind, so it would seem Could not escape this deadly scene I tried to scream! I could not scream! I sought relief, but could not rest My spirit sealed,My soul possessed Retrieve my peace!, I do protest! I did my best, I did my best. Deep, Deeper, Down! My spirit bent in dark despair, of Hell's descent Inferno's pit, of no repent 'Twas no relent, 'Twas no relent!

 

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Fran Marie,
'Deadly Dream'
Even within our night visions we are experiencing life essence.
'In slumber came a dream so real
a midnight fog, so dead I feel'
Who knows what is really happening? Is God speaking to us?
Are we connected to others? I am fascinated by this kind of thing.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Fran Marie]

A h ha ..I see you have found this old relic ..I almost forgot I wrote this one..I thank you dear Kathy for your kind words on my poetry;

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Keep having fun with your writing and thank you

[FriendlyKittyCat]

The rhythm and rhyme sound great! Excellent poem.

[Deandra Dawn]

I really like this...I like your style and it flows beautifully with your excellent rhymes. Very good

[Fairytale]

I love your technique! So effective. This is a beautiful peom and the elegant font suits it well. I really enjoyed this one.

[Raymond]

Definately felt Poe'ish...very dark, very excellent...just one question (because my tech knowledge of poety is limited) the fourth line repeats in each stanza except for I tried to scream, I could not scream...what was your reason for the choice here?

[Star Wolf]

Very nicely dark and chilling!

[Fanciful Goddess]

GREAT POEM!!!!!!! amazing poem gave me chills and gave my inspiration...i once had a nightmare that i went to hell..it was awful..hope dosent happen to me..lol

[Dominic Rosales]

Great poem, it flows perfectly and I really enjoyed it a lot, thanks for your submission, this is beautiful and I really enjoyed it. Thanks

Wow this is very beautiful

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

What a haunting dream.

I sought relief, but could not rest
My spirit sealed,My soul possessed
Retrieve my peace!, I do protest!
I did my best, I did my best.