No Storms to Weather

No Storms to Weather

 

If we lived in a 'perfect world'
we will have reached
the only day in existence
there 'd be no need to argue
there would be no difference

Would we really be living in harmony?
in non realistic perfection
no mistakes to be made
no hard school of rules
no meeting muster for inspection

There'd be no conflicts
only heaven, no hell
no opposites
of good verses evil
no devil to repel

Nothing to strive for
no ambition
Atheletes would shrivel up
from lack of competition

no mountains standing before
nor behind us to have conquered
no storms to weather thru~
no problems whatsoever
with the horizon ever blue

We all would be so perfect
A perfectly unison bore
with everyone the same
no need to keep score

there wouldn't really be a future
life would cease to be
truly a one day exsistence
if we all lived perfectly

There be no comfort to
enjoy after a hard work day
no need for gratitude
nothing for which to pray

So in this non perfect world
we have to struggle on
to balance the nature of all things
in the order to which they belong.

And would a rose truly be as lovely,
without its prickly thorns?

Reviews

[The Archangel Gabriel]

"exsistance" Typo. "existence"

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/existence

"And would a rose truly be as lovely,
without its prickly thorns?"

A very good point! How cute is it when a baby steals a lollypop? That is one of the majesties of human free will.

What is the meaning of safety without murder and rape. I don't like them, but they bring meaning. Plus, we had to be made free. That is just a state of being, and the right one.

What you do with your freedom is a different matter altogether.

Another great write.

-Gabe

P.S. I have typos and misspellings in a few of my works. :) These things happen.

[The Philosopher's Noteb..]

Beautiful poem. I love the way you use Cosmology as the theme for your poem. But your definition of perfection is limited. You should have used the real/essential meaning of perfection for this work.

[DiamondNRough AKA Patty..]

"And would a rose truly be as lovely, without its prickly thorns?" A Beautiful Poem that helps us understand there is a purpose for the pain and sorrow we have had to endure in our past...But Look who we have become...A STRONG Survivor from our Past. Great Read!

Safe Hugs

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

"Nothing to strive for
no ambition
Atheletes would shrivel up
from lack of competition"

I loved this poem. It reminded me of some of my own work.
Here is an excerpt from the poem that it reminded me of.
{{If we took away our pain, it would be like taking a plant from the rain.
We use our pain to grow. The rocks on the path help direct the flow.}}
Love All, Mejasha

[Floating on the feather..]

Perfectness could be so imperfect to bear....The monotony of perfectness would be as bad as a relationship with no feelings, no excitement, no fuss and no happiness.
The sense of achievement that we derive from transforming an imperfect thing in this world close to perfectness would go away in thin air.The biggest sense on satisfaction is to make the ends meet, but if they have been like that then life would not be worth living.

Good write. Very evocative.

[Brenda Sue]

Beautifully written. Great job.

[Lady Of Darkness]

I love the points you have made in this piece.
The Title suits its content.
well done.

[Phil Sanders]

Beautifully written .. lovely argument .. so true .....

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

Great work here. Great format and everything.

Dave

[E. M. Murren]

Interesting interpretation of what could be. I seem opposites merging. Differences respected and tolerated. Mistakes forgiven. That sort of thing. We all learn from our mistakes... its a matter of learning to accept. That is my vision. Differences are good. This is well said, though, even through our differences. You pose some important questions through your art. Well done.