Smiling at You!

I'm smiling at you!

Baring my teeth to bear the hour; the day; the minute; the life! 

I'm smiling at you!

It feels naturally unnatural after all these years; these tears; these fears.

I'm smiling at you!

Because I've seen through the shield you wield to yield them.

I'm smiling at you!
To strengthen an invisible tether, to float a feather, represent the weather.
Mostly, I'm smiling with you!
Your energy; your moxie; your gorgeous simplicity.

I'm smiling with you! 

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

I had to immediately listen to "Everybody wants to rule the world" by Tears For Fears after reading this.

It's a terrific song.

[FractalLuna]

An incredible tune!

"There's a room where the light won't find you."

[Davidgeo]

Isn't it lovely? An underrated classic.
"welcome to your life
there's no turning back...
nothing ever lasts forever"

If we would all internalize this more I do think we'd be a more content species. My cat looks at me a little sideways sometimes, and I can tell he's figured this out already... without even the need for words. Human consciousness might be fundamentally masochistic. A certain type of emotional pain might be an evolutionary advantage. (it is)

[Davidgeo]

We are the only species to formally bury and revisit our dead. Elephants do this, sort of... but not like humans. Nothing has graveyards like humans.

[FractalLuna]

We're definitely the only species that goes against our own nature.
Is that the dream or the nightmare? To willfully and woefully change our existence to some sort of vapid "upgrade?"
We already had what made us content, then contentment meant stagnant.
Bummer.
We're emotional badasses, however, to what cost?

[Davidgeo]

Emotional cost is particularly relative I think. I know people who wouldn't cry in public for 100 thousand dollars... I also know people who are willing to cry at any time in front of anyone for relatively small amounts of money. Contentment can be pretty cheap no matter how much is 'costs' if you do it right. Cry, don't cry... it's pretty cheap objectively. If we weren't so emotionally fragile mental illness wouldn't be so pervasive.

[Franky]

This is sweetly romantic and enticing. Well done. I can feel the emotion in this.

[Relic]

I like the poem, however, if I give you a slight critique, will you still smile? Or will you feed me to the wolfs, never again to write another word or say hello to the mailman?

[FractalLuna]

This comment made me smile!

[Relic]

Okay then, I take it It's okay. :)

I like repetition although I think the phrase "I'm smiling at you may be used a tad too much. Also: the lines "to float a feather, represent the weather," seems out of context to me.

I'm sure others will disagree and I hope they do, but anyway, the great oz has spoken. :D

[FractalLuna]

That's fair! Thanks for the critique!

[Relic]

No problem.

On a side note: I had to go to your page to make sure you didn't block me. haha