Mistakes

I wrote this to give my opinion on peoples actions when they say people can't change.

“Once a cheater always a cheater.”

Those were your words, not mine,

Having suppressed my emotions for so long,

This strangled heart made clear it had no intentions of surrendering,

I remember the day you called me into your house, 

I was nervous and sweaty, armed but not ready,

To hear what you prepared for me,

You began to talk though I was not listening,

Captivated by the screaming silence throughout the halls of your home,

I snapped back into focus just for a second,

Just long enough to hear the words “dirty” and “worthless,”

My legs shot up as I turned and began to walk away,

An intrigued look filled your face,

One that I will never forget,

I was young and stupid,

But that was years ago,

I’ve apologized to the heavens and back,

In an attempt to restore my fading soul,

Yet you found joy in letting me relive my mistakes,

I was done, finally finished,

You long before,

True love is not to never make mistakes,

But to find forgiveness when mistakes are made,

Not all actions are intended,

However you pre-planned this attack,

Rendering our love useless,

I stepped into my car and drove away,

For no longer was I going to be undermined and treated like a child for my previous wrong doings,

Perhaps I’ll prove that people can change,

And just maybe,

One day you’ll see where you made your mistake.

Author's Note

Reviews and constructive criticism are appreciated. My main focus was not spelling and grammar. Thanks :)

Reviews

[Amber Elaine Marshall]

Nicely written you captured the essence of the thoughts and emotions of individuals in these situations very well. Description is what makes a piece of writing come to life the more detailed the writing the more impact it has on the reader when the reader can identify and feel what that they have read hits close to home and they can even imagine the story as clear as day as if it were one of their memories makes for excellent writing your off to a great start!

[Cassiopia Summers]

Wow, I feel for you honestly. People can change, I've seen it happen, and they deserve a second chance. I'm sorry to see you were not, however everything happens for a reason so this just means you'll recieve something that'll make you happier than the second chance would have.

"True love is not to never make mistakes,
But to find forgiveness when mistakes are made,
Not all actions are intended,
However you pre-planned this attack,
Rendering our love useless,
I stepped into my car and drove away,
For no longer was I going to be undermined and treated like a child for my previous wrong doings,
Perhaps I’ll prove that people can change,
And just maybe,
One day you’ll see where you made your mistake."
This is a very true part, and the lines "True love is not to never make mistakes, but to find forgiveness when mistakes are made" is absolutely heart-touching. It's my favorite part of this entire poem, and quite frankly holds a hundrend percent truth. Thanks for sharing, and if you don't mind, I'd like to quote you.

[Cynthia]

The emotions are strong and powerful. And I love the idea of your writing! I love the way you talked about mistakes in love, I love the ending, its really strong as well, the details have formed a really great story!
Overall, I love this poem :D
Nice written!

[foreveryours<3]

I get the emotions. It is amazing:)
Keep it up