I still feel you

i wrote a poem about an angel, but what is it like from the others view?

You were torn from my life leaving my heart in darkness,

you were my friend and my lover yet you left me,

You were always by my side but now you're gone,

I still feel you, are you still here?

 

My life still flows,

but now it's just an empty ocean,

no light, no hope, no happiness,

can you hear me cry? can you hear me calling?

 

I have found a friend,

a kindred spirit you saved me from the darkness,

but i still see you in his eyes,

can you see me? do you feel my pain?

 

I now can smile,

i have you again at last,

you heard my cry and you touched my heart,

you fill my ocean with the soft touch of another's love

 

 

Author's Note

If you search my earlier work you'll see i wrote a poem called angel. Well i had a mental block for a while but inspiratiuon hit when i re-read it and wondered how would it feel to be on the otherside of this relationship, please tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This is beautiful, well written my friend, I think you did an amazing job at writing from that perspective.

[CourtneyShay]

wow i can tell your upset bout something in this writting but i loved it

[Cree Nations]

I actually felt the loneliness. A good write, a sad read for me. Thank you

[Jazique]

It was nice and interesting them as to still feel someone on the outside of things. For when someone is lost you can always be rescued by the one who hears your cries and showed this well escaping from the darkness to be welcomed by a smile. Well done.

[fernii]

love it, truly great poem :)

[Casper]

Loved it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to replace a real people you have loved and care for. I like the lines.
"I have found a friend,
a kindred spirit you saved me from the darkness,
but i still see you in his eyes,
can you see me? do you feel my pain?"
I like the ending to this excellent poem.
Coyote

[Joiedevivre]

like a phantom limb. Good one, reminded me of similar times, difficult times, well expressed.

[T.W. Early]

This is a good complement to angel. it seems complete with both sides. nice job.