A Love that would not bleed

I wanted your heart yet it was thorned and rotten,

A black pustule of oozing desire,

But not for me you wanted more,

You could not ignore your carnal lust,

The animalistic spirit you so possess,

I once believed you were an angel brought into my life,

But you were nothing more than shrivelled wench.

It was too late for me,

I had already bitten into the cursed fruit,

Bound by my love for her I suffered,

My loyalty became chains binding me to her,

My soul became caged by my denial,

I believed I was a poet of romance once,

But now I am voice shrouded in this art.

A common jester I was to her,

A puppet in her game,

Controlled by her beckoning fingers,

Restrained by her succubus smile,

I am but a mortal man susceptible to pain,

It wasn't so much that she shared her supple skin,

But that my love refused to bleed,

And die with her betrayal.  

Reviews

[Mak(ayla:)]

I can totally come to understanding when I read this. I know how it feels to be played and it hurts! This is very well written, and well explained! I look forward to reading more of your poetry.

-Mak(:

[Calissa Knox]

Wow. I love the depth of emotion, and picture you painted in this poem. This is dramatic and expressive poetry, yet it is artistic and beautiful. Poetry that comes from the heart is the best kind there is. You definitely have my respect!

[Summer]

This holds so much emotion. I can tell you are not on good terms with this person. A very strong write.

[Forgotten]

I wanted to be on good terms but she wouldn't have it even though she was the one that caused everything to go pear shaped. Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed this

[Summer]

That sucks, I prefer to be on good with me ex boyfriend.... I only have one though.... Haah.

[Forgotten]

I would like to be on good terms with both of my exs but they don't want that

[Summer]

Forget them then. They're sad if they don't/

[Winchester Saltgunner]

that is beautifuly written i loved every word of it

[Forgotten]

Oh well thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Winchester Saltgunner]

your welcome!i am glad to read it lol :)

[TL Boehm]

Holy cow. you are a formidable talent. I 've read you before - just a couple of times but saw you on miss noodletoodle's page - and thought I would refresh my memory on your writing. I was not disappointed. This is visceral. It breathes through clenched teeth. Impressive.

[Forgotten]

Haha yeah you probably didn't see me in the best light there :/ Haha thank you I'm glad you enjoyed this :)

[TL Boehm]

No worries! I am often a tad feral when I write - and when defending a friend I can be rabid.

[Forgotten]

Haha well she's a very good friend, I'd defend her with my life. I won't have people like that causing her trouble

[TL Boehm]

She's a peach! And you are an excellent writer.

[Forgotten]

She's a wonderful person, someone very close to my heart :) Awww, well thank you, I've read a couple of your stuff before, you're much better than me :)

[TL Boehm]

thank you. I'm "prolific" so every once in awhile the law of averages pivots in my favor and a write a passable piece. :)

[Forgotten]

Hehe, I'd say that happens more than you think it does missy

[koty bell]

Heartbreaking yet relatable... Great work my friend

[MOON]

Poignant write heartbreaking last few lines affirming.

[Distantview123]

An imaginative write, that many readers will be able to relate to...I for one have known one or two women like that! We all need love, but not at any price! Well penned. ~ Robert.

[ron]

Its one of the most painful things a person can go through, and worst part is it one of the few things in life we cannot control. Well penned.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

YES...I said it...ORGANIC! lol