A moth amongst butterflies

A lot of us feel invisible,

To the naked eye we are shadows in the shade,

Afraid to be judged by others we hide,

We fade into air,

Scared of the harsh tongue and coarse verses.

I am a moth amongst butterflies,

Ugly to their callous eyes they force me to fade,

Averted gazes and contact I am often left alone,

Dull upon appearance I am a moth,

Rejected by many.

Yet upon their indifference I could care not,

A moth I may be a fact I could not deny,

Yet beneath my tattered wings, 

I speak proudly,

As I am content being the moth upon conceited eyes. 

Reviews

[Mia]

One of two things is true. Either you are stupid and don’t know a good thing when you write it or you’re a perfectionist genius poet and this is the kind of stuff you write in your sleep. What is true for both those things is that, you’re wrong and this is great. I’m not an expert when it comes to poetry; in fact I just started trying it out. But I read and that’s who you’re targeting when you write something. I’ve come to learn that you can completely forgive a poem for not being perfect if it has one line that you grabs you.
“I am a moth amongst butterflies,
Ugly to their callous eyes they force me to fade,”

After reading that line...all was forgiven :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting poem. I like the different between the butterfly and the moth. I like your logic in the poem. I like the strong statement at the end.
"As I am content being the moth upon conceited eyes. "
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Helen Crutchett]

This has the bare bones of a fantastic poem. I'd just make it 'flow' a little more if you can. I absolutely liked the theme of this. I know where you are coming from. Moths are the dull cousins of butterflies. We would all like to think we are 'butterflies' I suppose, but you are happy with being a tattered winged moth! This was profound, truly. I liked it!

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This poem is amazing!
Excellent work!
100/100

[Ezekiel Silver]

I really like this poem! I love the imagery put into as well as the way I can connect to the message in it. Great work!!!

[Lizbeth]

No, this definitely is not bad :) One reads one's own work so much, it's difficult to know what others will think.
I like the following line, it says so much:
"To the naked eye we are shadows in the shade,"

It's good to stand by what one believes in and not to be put off by all the butterflies out there ...
Thanks for sharing
Lizbeth

[Bats In The Belfry]

I think its simply wonderful. Simple yet delivers a loud and clear message. I love the moth butterfly comparison. Great job.

[afra]

bad? i think it was awesome ....i love it

[Patricia B. Hepler]

You are comfortable in your own skin-something many people never achieve in their own lifetime. Excellent. pat