I Loved Her

just things you go through after a real relationship is broken up

Some days I think about you, and I kind of smile

Cause I'm missing your pretty face I know its been a while

And you don't have to write me back, I ain't even mad

But even if you thaught about it it would make me glad

I thaught that it was love, you had me ditching class

And when i couldn't focus you kept a n***a on task

And some days I think about how I was with you

Other days I think about how I use to kiss you

And today I only think about how I miss you

It's a shame but I was a fool when I dissed you

When I promised I would be there, and never ever trick you

And tomarrow am I crazy if I want you back?

The guy you're with now, I try to never wonder that

Promised you that I'd be back, but I never made it

Babe if I never told you, well this just helps me say it

 

I'm in deep pain, rotting from the heart to my brain

Your fire's burning strong like and open candle flame

Remember the days, remember the pain

Remember your ways, and regret the change

Remembering the tender touch of your lips

The way I used to hold you with my hands around your hips

And we would kiss, the rest just watched

Either times have changed or I'm on a new clock

Cause I don't understand why  I can't let you go

We tried to keep it on the low

Feelings for you spoke volumes babe

And thats how all the rest would know

that I love you, put no one above you

The time we spent together all I loved to do is spoil you

And see you smile, make you laugh

When you were mad I still knew how to make you smile

You basically were mines, treated as my only child

Now my hearts hazardous like a black and mile

And I would walk 2 , 3, 4 miles just to see you

The rest wanted to be you

They saw us in the halls and they couldn't stand to see you

See boo, but now it's time that I regroup

and pull myself to one piece

Now it's back to one deep

But you were apart of me, heartbreak was the start of this

Damn I'm still missing you ... Is that smart of me??? 

 

 

Author's Note

this is a true happening,what can i say??

Reviews

[Anonymous Me]

i love this. I don't really have anything else to say

[S. Michael Long]

are you taking creative writing lessons at school, or at college? if you aren't you should. I have avoided them for years.. and you have talent. A college level class can give you the basics.. of understanding how to get your point across, to people who would otherwise walk away... man you have something here that is good. you just have to refine it... its brilliant!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Would I be wrong if I told you I can picture you singing this? Raw and open, pure excellence

[Monique]

you totally love her!

[CrimsonBlaze]

Aw, I can definitely feel the emotions swirling in the poem and I have to say, this was well written, and it flowed very nicely. There were a few mispellings and whatnot, but otherwise, since you said this was a true happening, I hope you're okay. But anyways, this is still a lovely poem ..

[Aella.lives]

Interesting. Can definitely feel the emotions. I haven't read many rhyming poetry in a while, that made me smile.

There were a few grammar/misspellings but still a very good write.

:)

[AK]

Very nice poem. So heartfelt. If it's a true happening then it's really sad. But great poem!