Ecstasy

I stand on a moutian top and still hold the view of an ant

I see what others cannot see

I feel much more deeply, royalty, excitment beyond any imagination

I am at the top of the top, and at this kind of high ...

I don't believe in come downs

So hear me, feel me, i'm friendly don't fear me

The world is rapidly spinning  near me

I just cant find my mind

Colors of the rainbow, are role play to my eyes

I might sleep with every girl in town tonight

This feeling is a peace, love and healing

 

Reviews

[Who Cares]

Wow I like the comparison of this mountain and being high from drugs. This is talent, your words are powerful and you stick to a general theme I really like it. Only thing I can really say techinally is in the sixth line im should be I'm other than that GREAT job

[eli mercuree rue]

there are others who feel what you feel and see what you see and hear what you hear...

it's all a matter of perspective; conscious perception
evolving thought

the feeling of peace, love, and healing are the result of your openness and your ability to accept and to give love

divine, creative insight makes us feel the freedom that is ours

that moment of bliss when we enter We.

clarity, ecstasy. mmmm yeah.



hold onto this feeling, evoke it whenever you can because it is the only truth.

[S. Michael Long]

also, when you say, "so hear me" it is a invitation to listen, so you could probably remove the feel me.. like, i was feeling what you were trying to say, when you said "so hear me" man, you got skills.. you, like i am, are always struggling to get people to listen to what you have to say, (and you want them to understand what you are saying) You have great things and awesome things to say.. but, like myself, i try to hard to get people to listen to me, when you write, you are saying things that are powerful, and things that need to be heard. and in this forum, in this place, people will hear you, so what im trying to say is.. keep writing and keep spilling your guts, but try not to get the reader to listen, because, they are here looking at your poem, you dont have to convince us. we just want to hear what you have to say!

[S. Michael Long]

i love this, but i got lost on the 3rd line.. like i was picturing myself as an ant.. seeing what others cant see, i was there with the feeling more deeply and with the royalty.. i think i got lost at excitement beyond imagination. I get what you were saying, but it broke my ability to listen because i had to stop and think about it.. This is good work.. keep editing! Nice job!

[Aella.lives]

I adore the first line, very deep. Well written!

[AK]

Wow! Amazing poem! I liked the aura of it. Great write!