Vicious Countdown

One.

Quick slap to

the side of my face

making me wince and fall

to the hard floor

 

Two.

Strong Punches

into my side

making me weeze and

grip my stomach

 

Three.

Times thrown to the floor

smashing my head on the table

glass dug into my leg

from your shattered window

 

Four.

Small tears rolling

down my cheek 

making you laugh

at my weakness

 

Five.

Kicks to my body

flinging me to the wall

leaving me facedown

on a carpet smelling of booze

and weed

 

One.

Last hit to me

made me scream

Shriek and run

as far as I could as

I flung through the door

 

Two.

Feet running as far

away from you as possible

As fast As I can

with the energy I managed

to have left

 

Three.

blocks later I collapse

on someones steps

hearing your footsteps

behind me

 

Four.

Short breathes

escape my lips

as I shiver from the cold

the frostover my shoes

 

Five.

More Minutes

until I did escape

the pain and torture

of the hell yu left me in

the broken stupid cage

that left me like this.

But in the end there was

too many bruises

 left all obver my body

Reviews

[Inyourshadow]

One last kiss
two teeth tearing...

I relate too closely to this poem for it is not only women that face drunken abusive partners and like this poem I too finally made my escape but not unscarred, scars I still bear. Powerful and painful penning, keep em' coming

[Winslow Des Totes]

Wonderful diction and syntax, made for a very powerful write. The last line there seemed to echo in my mind. :) Awesome write!

[Aka.Hipster]

I love the font and the set up and the writing.
You wrote so good I'm enjoying Your writing:)

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

omg i love it, what do you mean you dont like it...i like how you related each number to what is going on in each stanza and i was very emotional

[paradise]

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