Underland Facade

Thoughts of despair

keep Alice Alive

She breathes In air

Then forgets to thrive

 

Dandillion wishes

Keep her sane

But she fell down a whole

And lost the game

 

The rabbit was Late

Dodo birds are dead

Flowers are mean

"Now Off with your head"

 

The Red Queens Jobbawocky

Doesn't fight fair

His claws are sharp

And tangle Alice`s Hair.

 

The Bandasbatch cries

For all to hear

Twist alice's stomach

and increases her fear

Author's Note

I was talking to my grandma one time and she said "To the moon alice" It got me thinking i should should write a poem this is wht I came up with should I continue it?? Please help

Reviews

[Dark Dancer (Grass Seed..]

I don't care bout what the others say... well im not very good so... i shouldnt be talking
But I love it! I wish i had your creative mind to write like u!!

[light and ashes]

I like this but I do think it could use a little more work. Then again that is my opinion and as long as you are completely happy and satisfied with it that is all that matters.

[Immortal Phantom]

i used to love Alice in Wonderland but now poems about it made me sick of it. i loved the entire plot and the morale, now it's been ruined. but i think this poem's plot has been done before...ALOT. this is just my opinion.

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

i don't know how to help continue it but i am in love with this poem...you did a great job taking the Alice in wonderland and making it a poem that actually has meaning...my favourite line is "The rabbit was late ; dodo birds are dead"...AMAZING job