Nightshade Eclipse

Moon the young girl who's eyes shine

Young and beautiful- she always hide

 

Loving a boy that could never be hers

Of course she tries to tel him but its all a blur

Vagary of a dream she dies for his love

Effortlessly she dances but he comes to shove

 

Shortly here after he breaks her heart

Tries to fix but  it falls apart

Occurence of a story she dies in his arms

Reaching out to save her- he fins fable scars

Yearning for forgiveness he kills himself too

  Oh my sweet Moon I have always loved you

 

Author's Note

Acrostic poem i dont write these kind so plse dont judge. Its supposed to spell "My Love Story" and then an extra sentance

Reviews

[Inyourshadow]

Romeo and Juliet retold in beautiful elegance. The sadness of the emotional ending shows the love and the loss a heart can feel but never truely endure. Keep em' coming

[Rhea]

i can feel a sense of empty love..... its very sweet... :)

[emma]

very cool how you made it an acrostic poem. i liked the wording of this poem, especially, "yearning for forgiveness he kills himself too." very strong.

[light and ashes]

You brought to life for me this story that I have not ever read. It is very tragic, really nice write.

[~Sociopath~]

pretty goood

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Such a wonderful, beuatiful write.

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

it was beautifully written...i love the lines "loving a boy that could never be hers" and "reaching out to save her-he finds fable scars" because the show what love can do...