Twisted Harmonies

A story of a lost girl who commited suicide

So tell me darling would you care?
If you saw me crying over there
Was it to hard for you to bare
Or were you just reassuring yourself lifes not fair

Would you care if you saw scarred wrists
Or were you just hoping it would cease to excist
Well let me tell you its hard enough to resist
But then one night a slice and twist

Could you believe I wouldn't eat for days
You saw pain but you would just gaze
No you said it's just a phase
Well look now at your feet I lay

Could you think I would tie knots?
You just stood there took your shots
Can you believe those were my thoughts?
But were you surprised when you heard the gunshots?

Bloody Bruised Helpless Used Hurting Pain what more to lose Grab the weapon aim the gun shhh now I won't tell anyone. There on the ground the young girl lays Carrying out the plot she made for days.Scarred arms on her wrists but there was no help she could not resist.

Reviews

[Everson Taveras]

It's amazing what some people will do for love, for just one chance to catch the someone's attention, if only for a moment where there undying love is confessed in act of suicide. How very sad is the piece. How very powerful are words, carried by the current of this poem. Endearingly written thing this is. Thank you for sharing.

[paradise]

THANK YOUSS!! To anyone who reviews!!! FLUX AND FLOW!!!!

[Bridgette's Ink]

oh my gosh!! i want to be able to write poetry like this one day it is absolutely beautiful and raw.

[paradise]

Oh thank you adn its no problem I don't take any offence i understood what you meant :D

[Queen of Cards]

this is great! sorry for other comment from before :(

[WhiteQueen♥]

Such a sad poem with so much deep emotion, but so very well-written I really liked how you wrote it. There were a few parts that really just didn't flow very well ex. the last line of the first stanza, but your detail in writing is really nice. Your a great writer, keep up the good work. This was really impressive.

[paradise]

I know you guys do I love you guys too.

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

you know we all love you and we will never let anything happen to you.. but the thing you say and the words you use are so sad but so meaningful all at the same time... never forget that love is infinite...