Can you Hear me out There

a new poem of mine

I gaze through the clouds
Unable to see
I am broken and befreft
Don't you feel
That I yearn for something I'll never have?
Don't you see
That I do not try.
My life is a series of walls
And I am trapped between.
It is a vicious cycle of pain
And there is nothing more.
Breath life into me again
Make it all go away
Will I be myself again?

Author's Note

finally a new poem- I love it.

Reviews

[PhoeniX]

a piece full of hopelessness. lost in its own sorrow. we all yearn for something we can not have. but we all have the choice to either make it our down fall for not getting that want or we can make an experience and see through it. but otherwise, well described. good piece

[JLMatthews]

It's great as usual- I like the depth.

[Chloe]

This is very blunt. It's one of those simple, few word thoughts that mean so much. It's almost like the phrase "I love you", if you know what I mean. Pretty good.

[Karen666]

yes you will be yourself again. Time always passes. great piece

[NJ Schneider]

Love it, as always haha

[Travis Wilson]

It is an emotionally deep poem, and describes a realism of your life right now
and to the last question asked...
"Will I be myself again?"
in all context every one changes every day neither the young nor the old can deny this. I will never be five again nor will I be 16 again, the more we live and grow we learn from our mistakes and from our blessings and life itself.
All that any of us can say is that who we are today is what we wont be tomorrow but instead someone completely new .
...I am smarter then you think...

[V. K. Harris]

Great emotional read. Well done.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this poem is fantastic. Wonderful job!!!

Heather

[Ember]

Hey, Nana. This is a good write, and the emotions behind it are very well conveyed and easy to understand. Good job~

[Nicole Renee]

I actually know how you feel when you say,"
Don't you feel
That I yearn for something I'll never have?" in a way.

But this was lovely poem!

-Nicole