More Time

written for a friend who got in a car crash last night and is now in a comma. I hope he's okay.

 

I wish I had said something else.

I wish I would’ve smiled the last time I saw you not cried.

It seems so distant- that day I said a quick goodbye.

I remember my eyes were filled with tears

And you only said things would get better.

Why wasn’t there something else I could say?

It seems so strange now- all those stupid arguments

And our bitter fights.

I’m loosing you through the cracks in my fingers

And I look back to those times when we were smiling

And say I wish we had more time.

Author's Note

Written for a friend who i found out was in a comma earlier today. He got into a car crash- and they don't know he's gonna make it... So this is for him.

Reviews

[JLMatthews]

I like it, but its very sad- glad that he (whoever it is) is okay. (I read Niki's review)

[Red_Queen]

Time is something NO ONE has enough of. I waste it. i spend it. i sell it. i destroy it. F**k it makes me so angry some times just when i think about how little time i have to do all he things i want to.

[Alexander W. Quinn]

I'm sorry to hear about such a terrible event. I'll keep the both of you in my thoughts.

[Joseph - Michael]

I'm truly sorry to hear about your friend. I hope that he'll make it through, because he just have to read what you just wrote for him. I'm pretty sure that he'll be so damn lucky to have someone like you

So, it's a real good write...

[Rin]

I like the "I'm loosing you through the cracks in my fingers," very emotional poem. I like the honesty of this. Really good.

[PhoeniX]

heart felt and sorrowful. the heart aches and looks back at the moments that don't matter now. his life is at stake and this described nothing but how hopeful you are that he will be ok. and that's the best thing anyone can do. written with the touch of reality. the best pieces come out when struck with reality. well done

[NJ Schneider]

I liked it a lot. I REALLY liked how short it was, because I'm trying to finish those two other chapters for DawnFlower AND the messed up fairytale first chapters, and the stalker first chapter, and the angel sin story, omg, I have so much work to do..BLEH.

But I'm glad he's ok now. I told you he would be =P

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

first off i am sad that more people have not read this yet..secondly i loved it..you made me want to read more..i related to this one because i have had a similiar situation..but it just was not as serious..i was sad that i didnt say more to that person before she was hurt..and that the last converstaion that we had was about a bunch of meaningless stuff..i was blabbing on about nothin and she just listened..later when i thought about it i wished that i woulda listened to her..and not talked so much..
"I'm loosing you through the cracks in my fingers"