I'm Fine

Just something I put together

 

Don’t let me think tonight dear

Or nothing will be alright.

Don’t let me have one last dream

Or else I fear I will never wake up.

I am stuck on this edge

And I fear I am about to fall.

All hope is gone

And nothing holds me up.

My will is growing weary

As day by day I push myself to the edge.

How long will I continue

In this alternate reality?

With a fake smile plastered on my face

As I repeat over and over again

The same horrible lie.

‘I’m fine’

Author's Note

Tell me what you think

Reviews

[JLMatthews]

I can relate- It's wonderful, I like it. I don't like it quite as nmuch as I like some of your others- I believe it's due to the flow, I think there's soemthing a bit off about it in the beginning- but it's still really good.

[Red_Queen]

Alot of people can connect with this poem. I really liked what it had to say the flow was a little off at least for me but that was my only complaint everything else about it was absolutly great.

love
Queenie


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[ah]

very very deep... i really like this, the only suggestion i have is to take out the word and, but other than that its really good, thanx for sharing

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

We all put up fronts to, and paste fake smiles upon our faces just to get through the day..but i am afraid that sometimes we must face what we are really hiding from..we must show our fear,pain and disappointment..tear off the mask and show our true selfs..because if we dont i think that would drive a person insane..we may be afraid of the risk that we are taking if we show our true feelings but that may be a risk that we have to take in order to release ourselves from a fautly appearance..i enjoyed the read..it was insightful..and capturing..i loved it..nice write..
Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!

s~Shanty~s

[Karen Raquepo]

I can relate,too,It's tough to live if our dreams aren't fulfilled,yet we continue desiring,that our heart or just our head is silly to someone.Oh,yes,we can say we're fine physically,but not emotionally.Days are coming on us,one by one,as we expend our lives,with or without unreachable dream.

[Joseph - Michael]

Yeah, I can related to all of things you've written down. For the past few months, I've be down so hard and everybody knew there's something wrong with me and always asked. "Are you alright? You sure?" and so on. Yet, I hated to say, "I'm fine" so I just say, "Don't mind me" instead. It does help sometimes...

Anyway, love the writing, so it's all good here...

[NJ Schneider]

I always know when you're not fine girly. Even when you say you are. But I'm proud of you for fightin it out today.

I liked this one.

[Alexander W. Quinn]

It hits home. Very honest and easy to identify to. I know I sigh everytime I say "I'm fine"...it's like code for "I'm crap, but please stop asking about it." Thank you for sharing.

[Imperfection]

With a fake smile plastered on my face

As I repeat over and over again

The same horrible lie.

'I'm fine'

I think most of us are going to identify with this.
I certainly did.
Well written.

[Antony]

Nana, holding back our true emotions, is not a good practice, it causes depression, which i read in this poem, our pride sometimes gets in our way, it is much better to scream and throw something against the wall. let it all hang out Nana.
Antony