Not Enough

Brand new random poem

 

Even if there was a way

To was all of this clean off

And start another day

It would never be enough.

 

If would be able to smile

Without forcing it

And make you happy once in a while

It would never be enough.

 

If I be your everything

And never let you down.

If I was worth something

It would never be enough

 

I have let you down

And I can’t undo it

I have fallen to the ground

And there was really nothing to it.

 

I am lifeless on the floor

Looking up at people staring

Wishing there was something more

And realizing no one is caring.

 

Nothing will ever be enough

So do not pick me up off the floor

I’ve tried to be tough

But that won’t help me anymore.

 

It’s not enough to try

It’s not enough to dream

Because my soul is dying

And nothing’s what is seems

 

I wanted to make it better

I wanted you to see

That I could be alright

But I fear that shall not be

 

I’m not enough for this

You disserve much better

I long for you kiss

But as it says in this letter

 

You need something more

Then a dirtied soul such as me

Something that’s not so sore

Something that can set you free.

 

I am beyond repair

More then the eye can see

I will never repair

So get away from me.

Author's Note

I like this so tell me your thoughts

Reviews

[Kelly D. Burris]

I hope this person can see evey one can be healed and everyone has value, tho some others don't see it. Some people just can't be pleased, no matter what one does, and then again, maybe they weren't the right one for you to begin with.
You did a great job on this piece, I really feel the emotions especially feeling overwhelmed and distraught.
Great write. Sorry this took so long to get to...technical difficulties...please excuse.
Blessings,
Kelly

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i can relate this to my writings called fallen and trapped, i think u might like them, i really enjoyed this one and i can relate to it, great write, very emotional and powerful again, thanx for sharing, keep writing

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

This is a very emotional poem and well written. I like it, nice work!!!

Heather

[Angel Bird]

This is a beautiful work. From line to line it gets the readers attention more and more, and sucks him in completely at the end. Very emotion transmitting piece. Here's a lot of philosophical potential. I love it. It's a great write.

[Joseph - Michael]

This is far too much of the emotionals, the feeling of the failure, scarifices, and so on

I don't know why, but I seriously loved this one and I just have to take it to my list, so it's all good here...

[Antony]

Nana, you put some powerful emotions into this poem, the rhyming was great other than the first few stanza's, where you have some errors. the flow is good and you have some great lines in this. glad i stopped by your page.
Antony

[Alexander W. Quinn]

The first three stanzas / paragraphs are a little rough sounding (strange grammar, perhaps), but right afterwards the piece is GREAT! The flow is fast paced and the emotional impact is raw and powerful. I especially liked the lines :
>>>"You need something more / Then a dirtied soul such as me" and "I am beyond repair / More then the eye can see"

[PhoeniX]

oh that was remarkable. it reminded me of a situation i went through. and i completely felt everything you wrote in this poem. i connect so well with this. this was beautiful. i would have to say, its the best poem ive read in a while. keep it up!

i would have to agree with mickey, there are some grammar errors but its still beautiful!

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Woh, i can feel every emotion here. Very well said. I can feel and relate to this so much. I'd just look over it one more time to fix a few grammar and spelling errors tho. But other than that, beautiful job with this one!

Mikey

[NJ Schneider]

mmm definately a favorite.