What I Need

another one

 

Our lips meet

My skin burns

I hear you

I smell you

I feel you

Entwined together

Sinking into the daze

Unable to make sense

Out of anything

But each other.

I am in a daze

I only feel you

I can only think of you

Nipping

Biting

Chewing

Licking

Passion is all I am capable of

Over

Under

Rolling beneath the sheets

I want you more and more

I am scared

Frightened

I’ve never been here before

In a place of pure passion

All I want is you

All I need is you

This may not be right

But it’s what I need

Reviews

[Requiem]

Nipping? Biting? chewing? Licking?
And here I thought that you were returning back to what you usually write poems about, lol. Took me by surprise. For a second I thought it was a viewpoint of chew toy and his passion the dog... don't know why I thought that... I got to the sheets part and realized that that might've been the wrong assumption. (Hey, you never knew with dogs. I had this puppy that always loved to get his toys under the rug and attack them that way.)

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

a very nice erotic write. wonderful job. some times it doesn't matter what it right... only what we need is going to feel that space.

[Tamme]

Very passionatly written. I like this line:
This may not be right
But it's what I need

It's a statement to which I can relate.

[V. K. Harris]

The never ending want of love, I am there and I feel this peice. Excellent.

[Emily B]

Round and round, I felt like I was on a merry-go-round and I didn't know whether to get off or stay on. It works wonderfully.

[James 'The Matador' Fao..]

wow, very passionate, i feel the same way too, excellent piece of work, keep it up

[Joseph - Michael]

Here is what I really think; Thway it way it was written, it's much more than just a "need" it expressed a lot more like "lusting of the virgin" I'll just say that it's good, yet there are only few minor things that are in the needs to be tweaking a little bit. But, hey, it's just me, so just keep what you want as long as you're a proud writer of this piece, so no worries...

[NJ Schneider]

*grins* I am speachless. And you know me, and that's not very normal. I really loved the flow, your use of words, the emotion in every word, and just...GAH! It was wonderfully amazing.

[HazelSkye]

Yummy... sexy... passionate... arousing. Thank you.

[Bubo]

Reminds me of me!
That all consuming passion for someone and we just can't get enough.............you convey those feelings so well in this and the flow is great.