I Still See You

I love this poem. It is one of my all time favorites that I have done

 

Swiftly spinning

Holding tightly

To the only hope I have left

My world is blurring

 

But I still see you

 

Gently tossing

Wistfully turning

Gracefully dancing

To a certain end

 

But I still see you

 

Hopelessness ensues

Anger floods

Pain fills

There is nothing left

 

But I still see you

 

There is a memory

Haunting my days

My sleepless nights

And no matter how hard I try

 

I still see you 

Reviews

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, this is a very nice poem. I like how you wrote it, great job!!!

Heather

[Kara Emily Krantz]

well done. :)

"My world is blurring

But I still see you"

that was my favorite place where you used the "i still see you" because you had the world blurring, but they were still clear.

;) nice piece

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very nice. It can be extremely difficult when you still see them. Then again, it can be extremely difficult when they are gone. Damned if you do, and...

-Gabe

[Jonny F]

i really liked this, it shows how a memory or a person etc...can stay in your mind all the time, no matter what is happening, well, thats just what i got from it anyway, v gud poem:)

[Joseph - Michael]

Yes, I know what it feel like. I still see my ex every time I pick up and drop off my son. Also, everytime I see my son, I still see his mother as well, so I can relate to your writing all the way.

Anyway, I wouldn't really call it a poem at all; It should be listed under "lyric" but, it's just me. It's all good...

[Michael Lopez]

it works
grieving is bitter sweet
in a lost love

[Bearcub The First]

Wow, that is just amazing, I love it amazing is the only word i can compare with this wonderful work

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

Veeery Veeery nice. I can feel the haunting feeling of this one.

[Tamme]

I really like how this is written. The lines are short and quick and it feels like glimpses of memories.

[Imperfection]

But I still see you



There is a memory

Haunting my days

My sleepless nights

And no matter how hard I try



I still see you

Very familiar feeling. This is my life right now.
It hurts badly and you've done a great job of expressing your pain through your words.