Look at Me

Something I felt a while ago that i needed to express

 

Tonight tonight

We only have tonight

            Lying in the sorrow.

                        Looking for wisdom

                                    In all the wrong places. 

           I look into your eyes

                       Looking for hope

                                   Looking for peace

          Looking for a trace of love

            But I saw no love

                        In the gleam in your eyes

                                    In fact I saw nothing at all

           Because you would not turn

                       To look me in the eye.

                                   The girl you once loved,

          And you will not even spare

                      A single glance my way.

                        Look at me

                                    Am I nothing to you now?

           Am I a memory you’d rather forget

                       Please  look at me one last time

                                   And remind me that I used

          To actually mean something to you.  

Reviews

[Emily B]

This would make a killer song lyric.Awesome write.

[Requiem]

Have you ever considered being a song writer? This would be so awesome as a song. I can just hear kittie doing this one... alternating between that angel voice and screaming full out.

[.]

Woh, yea, this i felt with deep emotions. It's like you keep asking these very important questions, true important love questions that need to be answered, and u even try to get him to look into your eyes (see eye to eye/face to face), still, you're getting no response in return. Brilliant write!

Mikey

[NJ Schneider]

I read this a while ago and never got the chance to comment. It's wonderful. i love who you styled the paragraphs! I really liked it Nana. ^-^

As ever,

Caine

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

i love the way you set this poem up... the flow is amazing... keep up the good work.

[V. K. Harris]

Excellent, I love the design on lines. Beautiful poem.

[Tamme]

I like the free flow to this... Both your words and placement of the lines. Good writing :)

[Poeticpiers]

sad beyond sadness. Love does not always last and the time comes to move on