Forbidden Lovers

This is the poem is inspired by my user name

 

A broken night,

Tormented by dawn

Comes to a timely end.

The stars they fade

And the moon she sinks.

As the morning comes

The girl wakens

Lying in a bed of thorns,

Lying in his arms.

She knows their time is growing short.

The dawn breaks

And his eyes open.

They share a final kiss.

Forbidden lovers by moon light,

And strangers by day

In this strange world they call their own.

Reviews

[Tusc]

I was touched by this poem. Well done. I think you would appreciate Pamela Murphy's poem We Both Know.

[Requiem]

It's like one of those poems that have alternate meanings in them. How all things must come to an end like the existence of our little planet or world or anything. (I"m in a weird mood right now) I love the flow of this one, and there's almost a lightness to it, it doesn't seem as dark or twisted. Don't get me wrong I like all the dark and twistedy stuff out there, but sometimes a gal needs a breath of fresh air. And this poem is that, a breath of fresh air. Good job, hon.

[Tamme]

Very nicely written. I like the flow and rhythm of it.

[~ Tex]

A very nice write. I wouldn't change a thing!

[Rin]

Very nice, and emotional in a simple way. I like how you used nature and passion... I really like how sad it seems. Also I like the picture, it's from the game Shadowhearts Covenent right? Well anyways, really nice poem.

[V. K. Harris]

This is beautiful and so sad, Excellent write.

[Amor-de-angel]

Very nice. I love your work.

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

very lovely.... I really enjoyed this... though can't say I would like to wake up in a bed of thorns... ouch.

[.]

Ooo, that was pretty cool- I really like this one. Don't know, but i think it kinda resembles the old fashioned romantic ways of love, actually...like the girl is with the guy all day in some place they love to meet, but at night, the guy wakes her up or something by throwing some rocks or pebbles at her bedroom window, telling her to come down so they both can run away together to that same spot hehe- idk, I just thought of that picture when I was reading the poem ;)

Awesome Words Tho!

Mikey