Mistakes

Something I was really feeling strongly for a long time

 

Realization

Hits me hard now

Forgiveness

Is something I don’t deserve

 You

Are something I can’t have. I am

Spiraling

Downwards and I can’t seem to

Stop

I look for something I can’t have and I

Hurt

You in the process. I make these

Mistakes

Over and over again but

Nothing

Is going to keep me from hurting you so

Run

As far away from me as you can

Please

Keep hurting me as much as you can because

I

Will never stop hurting you because I make these same

Mistakes

Over and over again

Reviews

[~ Tex]

Very intense. I don't know if all of that is deserved... it does seem harsh, but we're not here to debate that. I certainly understand the feelings.

It is very well written. Concise. Powerful.

The layout is perfect. I think it really works and it pulls the reader in and holds the eye all the way through to the intense ending.

I think you did a marvelous job on this!

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

this is a wonderful piece... It hurts to know you can not stop hurting the person that is hurting you... it's a never ending cycle. Pain evokes pain.

[Requiem]

I can so see this as a song maybe someone like Sarah Bettens or even Jane Siberry. The flow fits and it does draw one into the piece.

[Emily B]

The words spiral down and down. The form greatly enhances your choice of words. Great work!

[NJ Schneider]

Wren, you know I love your work. I don't think I've read a piece that I didn't like. You have some amazing talent and it shows. I don't see why you always beat yourself up so badly all the time. I know you just say 'that's just how I am' but how can you write such great things and not think you have talent? You're a good person Wren and I'll have words with anyone who says other wise.

[Amor-de-angel]

I can sense the pain in this piece. Very well written and expressed

[Tamme]

It's those cycles we all get stuck in from time to time. Been there. And I swear it's writing these things that keep me sane.