I Miss You

I love this poem- one of the first Acrostics I tried

 

I lie awake at night in a

Maelstrom of mixed emotions

I want you so bad that I feel

Sadness from every part of me

Seeping through me like poison

You don’t seem to realize.

Open you eyes can’t you tell that I’m still

Under your spell

 

I miss you

Reviews

[The Archangel Gabriel]

You might want to make the first letter bold faced or double it like this:

"I I like....

M Miss....
I I like....
S Sure...."

It is often difficult to identify an acrostice unless you designate it so. The Queen of acrostics, Amor-de-angel, likes to do a different color for the first letter with single letters, and I like like to do double letters with just bold face.

I really like this, especially for one of your first tries at an acrostic. Your title just tends to blend into the poem.

Wonderful write.

-Gabe

[Shelly Wiseberg]

Lovely write, I love the I miss you in blue lettering , a heartfelt and emotional poem,Shelly

[Requiem]

'Maelstrom of mixed emotion' I love that line. Good acrostic (no clue if I spelled that right, but since there's no flash of colours, I think I'm safe.)

[An Ordinary Woman]

What a wonderful acrostic, beautiful yet heart wrenching and honest.

~ also ... thank you so much for reading/reviewing "Me and my dreams"

[Lydia Shutter]

Deeply emotional acrostic. Palpable longing! Lydia

[rachel D]

i like it too wren.
"Maelstrom of mixed emotions" is a very well put together little line!
nice work.

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

great acrostics.... a beautiful write.

[NJ Schneider]

ooooo I likes it. It's pretty ^.^ And I like the, oh god I forgot the name. But the taking a word thing and yeah. You get what I mean. I was thinking of doing that for a poem myself.

[V. K. Harris]

This is beautiful, I have been there tossing and turning in torturous sleepless nights. Great Write.

[Tamme]

This subject would have fit me well about three weeks ago. The lines:
"I want you so bad that I feel

Sadness from every part of me"
brought me back for a moment. I like it.

Isn't it a fun way to write?