Broken Wings

I love this poem too.

 

Falling gently
Because I tried to soar
On a pair of broken wings
That would not support my weight
Any longer.
They had held me up
For so long
With lasting effort
And my wearing soul
But I don't have that strenght anymore.
I cannot support myself
On my own.
So my feathers have left me
And my wings have broken
And I fall to earth
... I only await the crash

Reviews

[Choosing Life]

I love to this too.. *smiles*

I actually have a very similar piece called My Sweetest Downfall...

Wonderful scribe

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

beautiful...even angels without wings don't crash to earth.

[Jack of Aces]

pretty
sad
tears

[Requiem]

*Smiles* I like this one.
Most people dream of flying, I know I've had tons of dreams of me flying. It's so liberating just soaring through the sky. Also, you have the disastrous effect of trying to fly (kind of reminds me of Icarus).

Few spelling errors, but otherwise great.

[rachel D]

"and i fall to earth..... i only await the crash." i like this hanging ending. it goes well with the words you've written leading up to it.

[Tamme]

I love the imagery. Good writing.

[Amor-de-angel]

So sad. Nicely written. well done

[Emily B]

This is beautiful. I sometimes look at the sky and wish to fly off over the trees. And I think if some burst of wind picked me up and let me fly over rooftops up among the clouds, it would be well worth the crash that would eventually happen.

But, then, your words are sad. You speak of loneliness and struggle. Rest, dear, you'll grow new wings in time.

[NJ Schneider]

ooooooo I loves it