Passion

something I was feeling a long time ago that got me confused. I felt like i needed to add it

 

Falling
Gently into the
Warmth
Of your sweet embrace
Love
Is nothing to me
You
Are not what love means
I
am in way over my head and
You
Don't seem to mind. My
Body
Has overthrown my mind. I have no
Control
Over my simple actions
Don't
Take advantage of me for
I
Will not be able to stop you.
Please
be gentle and
Try
to be kind for I am lost in your
Passion.

Reviews

[Iretex2012]

what passion!

[Leinad Reyem]

maybe you could alter the format a little... and only stress on the occasion where absolutely necessary... especially to emphasize some of your powerful lines like

"You
Are not what love means" awesome line

"Don't
Take advantage of me for" which beautifully depicts your fear of what you're getting into..... maybe??


i wish i could feel like this....

[Athena Marie]

I like the format - the stress of every other line. I'm not sure I would have chosen "passion" as the last line... but regardless, this is a beautiful and emotional bit of writing. The words jump off the page. I love it. Well done!

[~ Tex]

I thought the grammar was fine and in this day and age, even misspellings are opt done with purpose and for effect. The layout was perfect, at least for me, as I felt the rhythm as I fell into a natural flow while reading.

[Tamme]

I like this a lot. It's so easy to identify with. Mixed feelings have a tendency to create awesome writing.

[Elijah H. Muied (6 Deep..]

I felt the Passion!!!

[NJ Schneider]

Omg I've totally been here. Haha. When you're at the point when you love someone so much and they've torn down all your defenses and now you just have to trust them with your emotions and your mantal state even if you don't trust tem at the same time. You just gotta hope and t sucks because they usually end up breaking you in to pieces.

Love it.

[cartoonist]

A very good write............Deb

[QuillandInkWhispers]

I loved your poem and don't worry about the grammar. :)