Beautiful Nightmares

It was perfect
And clean, and real
And solid
Like a glinting, crystal orb
Was what we felt
Or so I thought
And I savoured it

In your arms I lay
Content and smiling
Floating on my imaginary magic carpet
Bursting with colour
Graffiti tattoos of your name
Had already been engraved in my soul
With indelible ink- indelibly

We soared and crested
With heart, soul and spirit
Body omitted-
I repeat; it was clean
And pure like water
And like water, it evaporated
Before morning

Flat on my back
And feverish; gasping for air
Where there was none
Reaching out for you
And you were gone
Like a one-night stand
Like a mirage

I spewed love from the eroded corners
Of parched lips
Like dribble from morning drool;
Uncontrolled like that
Obscene like that
And it mapped out a conspicuous pattern
On my pillow

But, your mind was made up
You claimed not to see it
Yet, the whole world gaped
And marvelled at the magnitude of it
The altitude of it
The 'agape' attitude of it
They were stunned to silence

I tore out my hair and screamed
Nobody else heard me
Silent screams they were
So loud, yet, so silent
Screams like tiptoes in soft sand
Yes, silent like that
But, you heard me

You heard me;
Why didn't you answer me?

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This unfolds and the reader can envelop the lines... often dreams are vivid and yet not understated... the story goes and questions for an answer... leaves the reader to their own conclusion...

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid expression of emotion in this beautiful poem. A lover's dance within a dream only to awaken to a silent scream, wondering why love was unrequited. Well done, Ms. Scarlett.

[Scarlett Garnett]

Thank you, Mr. Brandon.

[Dutch Jr.]

Extremely well written, beautiful, emotion evoking, metaphorical masterpiece. The poem has a slight storytelling element to it, as you tell a story of how you become attached to a certain individual, tattooing his name into your soul (a very good, unique metaphoricala image, by the way) and how he simply treated as though it meant nothing. The pain is so blantantly present in this piece, describing it as though you're losing aur captures the essence of your emotional trauma. We can feel it through your words. This is an extraordinarily pieced poem.

[Scarlett Garnett]

Thank you so much, Dutch Jr.

[Katerina Felinova]

I have come across a couple dozen poems about love and heart ache recently. All unique in there own way, they have a common denominator that makes them ordinary. I'd have to say that this poem is one of the BEST poems I have read, period! You speak of this pain in such a beautiful way... It's like a beautiful disaster... Comparing the love to water, explaining how it evaporated and left you gasping for it, such a unique metaphor. I could feel how you felt at that exact moment, I could picture it all in my head. Beautiful, heartbreaking work you have done here.

On a side note, if this IS a personal experience poem, I am so sorry you had to go through this. From your pain, you learn, grow stronger and have made wonderful art!

Thank you for sharing.

-Katerina< 3

[Scarlett Garnett]

Wow. Thank you, Katerina. :')

[Kwiksie Ifediora]

Wow. This was so good and oh-so-moving. :')
The emotion in this is pretty audible, thanks to good expression and structure. Beautiful diction and really great similies too.
Folks, i think we have ourselves a winner! ^_^ mmmuah!

[Scarlett Garnett]

Indeed, much emotion was invested into this piece. Thank you, Kwiksie. :*

[Angel]

A broken-hearted cry from a broken love. I love the closing lines.
Well done!

[Scarlett Garnett]

Thank you, Angel.

[Samuel Jack]

Wow,tender,sentimental and when it needs to be, an erotic tour de force. Powerful stuff. I usually have favourite stanza's, but with this poem the whole thing flows perfectly together.

Keep up the good words.

Samuel

[Scarlett Garnett]

Thank you, Samuel! I'm so happy that you 'felt' it. :)

[Rob Santana]

Well written Scarlett, Very unique piece. I olve your choice of words.

[Scarlett Garnett]

Thank you!

[Ruthie Igunbor]

I love how it ends. Tiptoes in soft sand
a very pleasant read I must say. Well done Scarlett😊

[Scarlett Garnett]

Thank you, Ruth. I'm glad you liked it.

[Scarlett Garnett]

The sixth stanza( the third line): I made a 'typo'. I had intended to type "Yet". So, please, excuse me. :)