Lies

Lies

A Poem by FocusedAmnesia
"

20% life, 80% lies.

"


From top to bottom,

I'm buried alive; inside,
Completely consumed.
On each side I'm tied,
Weighed down by the pain.
A robot on the outside,
Yet being eaten from within,
My stone-cold mask is applied;
Trying to keep it from crumbling.
I sit here wide-eyed,
A body full of lies.

© 2010 FocusedAmnesia


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

Wow!This poem is magnetic! It really speaks to the readers. Bravo my Darling, another amazing piece of work you've created.Congrats! I love how you worded it, very creative. Also the line `i've been lied to from both sides' really speaks in this poem. It also holds great emotion.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

"A body full of lies." That just seals it up wonderfully.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Buried alive, eyes wide-open, eaten from within, is there any worse torment? I think not. Lies can really corner us, the more lies we tell, the smaller the way out becomes, until there is nolonger a way out. Very nice portrayal. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with the previous reviews. A wonderful piece with amazing expression and emotion. It gives the reader the feeling of suffocation and despair that lies can cause. Nicely done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

!00% excellent. Great work, better read.

Well done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice. 'A robot on the outside
Yet being eaten from within' loved those lines. The description was as good as the poem itself!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow!This poem is magnetic! It really speaks to the readers. Bravo my Darling, another amazing piece of work you've created.Congrats! I love how you worded it, very creative. Also the line `i've been lied to from both sides' really speaks in this poem. It also holds great emotion.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

279 Views
6 Reviews
Rating
Added on August 16, 2010
Last Updated on August 16, 2010

Author

FocusedAmnesia
FocusedAmnesia

NJ



About
Feel free to chat, send requests, and/or keep me company:] more..

Writing
Whole Whole

A Poem by FocusedAmnesia



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..