Ruined

I'm not sure,

But its happening I guess

Last Night I felt,

My heart beats were at rest

I was surprised,

I Felt for my nerves

Faint and faded,

Lost their purpose

I realized that instant,

I had lost the battle

Not like it was the first,

But this time it was fatal

Poisoning every inch of me,

That's what your love did

Killing me slowly,

As the venom spread

You didn't break me,

You tore me apart

What was once sedating with life

Is now a ruined heart!

Author's Note

So...what say guys?

Reviews

[Phantom Heart]

AHHH, the pains of love. I can totally relate to this. I can feel the pain in this one. Good descriptions and nice use of words. Thank you for sharing.

[Wórdsmíth]

Ah.. the love's just messy. It often gets messed up with heart. Sometimes, in a good way so sometimes, in a very bad way. Your poetry's very emotional that speaks directly from the core of your very heart. You've nicely shaped your words & managed the conception of love with the subject. Nice flow of ink.

[Flutterby aish]

Thank you for reading.

[africa]

It was alright I suppose.

[Flutterby aish]

I wrote it out of boredom. i'm glad its even alright.... hahaa :D . BTW, thnx for reading.

[Rainslover]

Brilliant! Tender and yet touches you hard! I can feel it- there what you say! That's what you got to do and you have done it with sheer excellence! It breaks us as we read it and goes straight to the heart! The way everything led was perfect! And the sadness in it- it is visible! This one is raw and I love raw ones! I can't specifically say which part I loved, because everything was slow and passionate read! Slow feels! Every letter increasing my feels for it! That's what your poem has done!
P.S.- I sent read request to you of your own poem. I was sending mine and this tab was open and I clicked suddenly. I am too crazy! Lol.

[Flutterby aish]

hahaa....its ok. And I appreciate your craziness cause I have a lot of it dwelling within myself too! :p
And Thankyou so much for the review. I'm glad you liked it! :D

[Rainslover]

Great to find people who are as crazy as you are!

[Flutterby aish]

Lolz! :D ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

You create sad and lonely place in the poetry.
"You didn't break me,
You tore me apart"
This is what love can do. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Flutterby aish]

Thank you for reading. :D

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.