Stolen

Bounded by the walls of your love,

Freedom is not an option for me,

Lost is the girl who lived for herself,

Captured in a prison she can't break free!

Infatuation was just an imagination,

I simply fell like a love sick retard,

Trust me, it hurts like hell now,

Now, when the real me is lost!

Crying somewhere in my heart, I am

Every minute as I fall apart,

Love was my crime, I now realize

Now, when the real me is lost!

How could I fall so badly for you?

How could I love you like that?

How could my feelings be strong enough?

That they killed the girl who once I was!

Lost in your world , I am now

Slave I am of my desires,

Craving and longing for your love, I am

Stolen is the real me, burnt in love's fire!

Author's Note

Well.........what say guys??????

Reviews

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Love the tone set in the poem. True, in any love, the real you is lost and Loved the " burt in love's fire" because love is a flame that consumes us all when we fall in love. We lose ourselves to it. Thanks for sharing. N.

[Flutterby aish]

Thankyou for your lovely words

[africa]

Very dramatic indeed. Good job.

[Flutterby aish]

Thank you.

[beautiful dreamer]

deep, very deep. Infatuation and hurt and betrayal. losing sight of yourself in the shadow of a person you are in love with....what a powerful feeling. how bad that must hurt to reflect on. i think you portrayed that emotion very well. i love how the last line of each stanza is bigger. you really get the point. i feel like i could read those and know the story and the rest was just intricate details that enhanced it. "burnt in loves fire" that my dear is a real thing. great emotion construction execution of such real subject matter. 100/100

[Flutterby aish]

Thank you sooo much for your kind words. :D

[ANTO]

I think this is very good - my stoopid head began reading as flipping Yoda on the last stanza but that says more about me than you because the whole of this is evocative and makes the lover in me wonder about the true nature of love - or 'the dark side perhaps, concentrating too much, I am' ;p
Again I say Im fast becoming a fan of yours.

[Flutterby aish]

Haha...well this one does represent its dark side. But love like any thing else in this world has its good as well as bad side! Thank you for taking out the time to read!

[TheLostMind]

Wow. This one is very powerful. The varying font sizes makes this more emotional. I just loved the way you started it -

"Bounded by the walls of your love,
Freedom is not an option for me,
Lost is the girl who lived for herself,
Captured in a prison she can't break free!" - quite astounding.

"Love was my crime, I now realize". I disagree. Love will never be a crime. In love, we just trust our instincts and then hope things will fall into place. It "just happens". There is no point in regretting it. Instead you should let go of the "bad" memories and look optimistically at the future. You will fall in love again, whether you want it or not. You will fall, you will break- only to rise again. Life is like a sinusoidal wave, you will fall only to rise again.

I am truly impressed with this write. :)

[Flutterby aish]

Wow thanks for the optimistic review! i agree that love is beautiful....its just this one was written when i was pretty off! ;p Thanks for reviewing though!

[TheLostMind]

We all have our ups and downs :P. You are welcome :)

[Arsh]

"Infatuation was just an imagination... " very powerful line expressing the depth of truth through your reddish words. Your emotions, and poor heartaches are well dispersed into your poetic words. I'd be looking forward to reading your poetry!

[Flutterby aish]

Thank you for taking out the time to read as well as review!

[junaid altaf]

entrapped in the web of emotions............
life is so twisting....
well crafted

[Flutterby aish]

Thank u!!!

[Danny]

"Lost in your world , I am now
Slave I am of my desires"

This part is especially great!
Great poem! :)

[Flutterby aish]

Thank you!

[☾Panda☽]

I love this poem, love is something we can't change, sometimes we love a person and that person don't love us back, but love is something precious that we not must forget

x Panda

[Flutterby aish]

Truly said!!!! Thnx for reviewing!

[☾Panda☽]

haha no problem!

[Gaurav Walia]

WOW!

My Fav. Part-

Infatuation was just an imagination,
I simply fell like a love sick retard,
Trust me, it hurts like hell now,
Now, when the real me is lost!

Crying somewhere in my heart, I am
Every minute as I fall apart,
Love was my crime, I now realize
Now, when the real me is lost!

You did an excellent job..KUDOS!

[Flutterby aish]

Thnx alotzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!!!!

[Gaurav Walia]

Anytime dear..