Pretty From the Back

S**t kiss girls won't you promise her smack, Is she pretty on the inside? Is she pretty from the back?

We drink away the pain,

Until its smoke in the air.

Now we're laughing at the high.

And you are all I smell,

As I taste cigarettes on his lips.

And all I hear is your heart beating,

As I'm laying on his chest.

But when I look at him,

I do not see you.

And when his eyes meet mine,

I do not feel you.

I prefer to be nothing.

No problem.

No saviour.

But I don't do too well on my own.

So tell me friends,

Am I pretty?

 

From the back?

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

A really interesting concept. I liked the way in which you explored the many different emotions associated with such an idea, and the fact that you were able to present the character in a way that made me as the reader both love, hate, and feel sympathy towards her. You always do an amazing job at capturing the reader's attention from the very first word, and this was no exception. I felt like I was right there in the midst of the action from the moment I started reading this, which helped to build a personal connection with the narrator of the poem. Great write,
~PaperHearts

[kyleisanidiot]

your gorgeous from every possible angle:D Sorry that im retarded :)

[J.M]

Ooooh - i love it bleak but captivating and intriguing. Fantastic idea and brilliantly described.
Thanks for sharing.
Jess.

[Sam]

I really really like this. I love how you worded it too!

[Lexi Nicole]

I like the whole feel of this. It's a kind of desperation. The opening is absolutely stunning and the rest of the poem fit perfectly into place. Nice job :)

[Liz-z]

"We drink away the pain,
Until its smoke in the air."
Beautiful, haha, it's supper. :)
"So tell me friends
Am I pretty?"
I really liked it, it was fantastic, thank you for sharing! :)

[Sincerely, Alex]

A lot of us don't do well on our own.
I like this piece a lot. It is entirely blunt but beautiful.