Drown

short....and......metaphorical....and.....short.

I smile at a memory

 

Then cry at the thought

 

And think of the possibility

 

That you could make me

 

 

Drown.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

I loved this. So subtle, yet so evocative. This poem seemed to sneak up on me without me realising, and it really wasn't until the end that I realised the depth and perception that this piece held. Both beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[kyleisanidiot]

and beautiful

[Penny Ellen]

21 words expressing an ocean of feelings? Amazing. Wonderful job.

[Liz-z]

Short yet meaningful.
"I smile at the memory
Then cry at the thought"
Did I mention relative? Fantastic job! :D

[Sincerely, Alex]

.....
I am going to hug you now.

-gets off couch and hugs you in the chair-

I am going to to have these lines floating around in my head now. They are magnificent,
The simplicty of this and placing of the words are so extremely powerful...
Amazing.

[X_Emo_Princess_X]

The line spacing is excellent, and it was short and to the point. But the words really speak in that short amount of time and that takes immense talent if you ask me. I just love it so much that I really can't express it in words but truly this is just...moving.

[Lunar Lightning]

I like this, it was really short and to the point, I ike the spacing of the lines, especially that last one. Well written.

Luna