Eyelash Wishing

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I once would have gave every lash, for your wishes to come true,

I once would have took my eyes for you to see.

I once would have broke my bones just so you could walk through,

I once would have cried, just so you could forgive me.

 

But now, I want my lashes back, the sand came into my eyes,

But now, I want my eyes back,to see through those lies.

And now, I want my bones fixed, so I could punch back,

Also now, I want those tears dried, ready for yet another attack.

 

I regret those days, which we spent fighting over a grade,

I regret those days, which were filled with screams, groans and moans.

I regret those days, which I went over to you for aid,

I regret those days, the ones that ended with angered tones.

 

That's why, I need my lashes back,

To wish that past away.

With each and every lash,

I'll forget each day.

 

Author's Note

A beautiful come back from me? I think so, its a bit heart felt, the problems of life usually get mirrored in poems like these, so I wish you would understand, enjoy and review, that would be kind. :)

-Flo <3

Reviews

[Domo]

This is the best poem I have ever read from you.
Its lines, they complimented each other in the best ways possible.
Your poems have always shown such deep emotion in them, but this one definitely shows the deepest you've ever expressed.
Great job on this poem, it is truly amazing.

[alan peter kelly]

sweet melancholy...I love the premise of eyelash wishes...enjoyed the way you reversed everything...I know it is a heartfelt write but still...I am getting old and it conjured up a melancholy smile....good work...

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This is such a heartfelt piece. Well Done Poet Well Done!

[Tate Morgan]

I like the emotion in the piece I wish it were a bit more musical in melody It is always best to tell of the things you have known rather than imagined I see this to be true to you

[Jen]

I am very impressed with the overall emotion ridden tone to this piece. And I especially like the piece because it's something many people can more or less relate to... or atleast I can....

Overall, great write, keep up the good work.

[Sean M. Addams]

a very deep and filled with lots of emotion... like the imagery in this alot ..overall great job... a really superb piece!!

[Undying Glory]

i really like this, and you're right, it is beautiful. and yes, we understand all too well, with all our regrets. this is just brilliant!

[cheeeeese]

I loved this, you expressed yourself well and there was so much emotion in this although it seemed simple. I also love the way you wrote this, it was very excellent and your rhyming was very good. The whole theme with the lashes was very unique and I've never seen a poem like this before, great job!

[deeps]

This is quite the emotional write here. I like this, it is very well expressed and very well written.

[Hollywood]

I loved it. It's very simple but moving.
My favorite lines are the ending, "That's why, I need my lashes back,
To wish that past away.
With each and every lash,
I'll forget each day"
This little rhyme is very well written, not over done.