Fragmented

A Plea to the Divine

Mother Goddess and God the Divine

Please Help Me Choose Carefully This Time

 

For Months Now This Lover Has Watched From Afar

Awaiting the Healing of My Freshest of Scars

 

Wisely Revealing an Intellect I Underestimated

Carefully Remembering Every Word I Have Stated

 

Presenting A Different Mirror to Reveal My Reflection

Teasing My Mind Into the Deepest of Revelations

 

Caressing Away Every Anxiety and Trepidation

Eyes That Yearn for and Beckon My Transcendant Submission

 

Shall I Delve Into The Myriad Shades of Gray

Succumb Despite My Impending Decision to Walk Away

 

How Far Can I Go Before I Risk Losing My Soul

Make Another Horcrux and I May Never Be Whole

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Bright Ocean Star]

Phoenix...this is a phenomenal piece. I love everything about it. The beginning plea or prayer, the middle, "Wisely revealing an intellect I underestimated, Carefully remembering every word I have stated", and the ending, especially. "How far can I go before I risk losing my soul/ make another Horcrux and I may never be whole". I is perfection. 100/100

[FlamingPhoenix]

Many many many thanks! I really enjoyed writing this one. First one I've sat down to write at a computer rather than just off the top of my head on the phone.

[Bright Ocean Star]

you are welcome! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful prayer for wisdom and direction. I like to wander to the forest and make proper decisions. I like the use of Mother Goddess and God the Divine. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you so much. I'm happy that you enjoyed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is so good...i think the speaker can trust this person...doesn't have an agenda...listens and loves and respects. The scars will heal...and trust can be rebuilt...and the speaker will keep her soul intact.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Sadly, the very opposite proved to be true--but the speaker shall mend--as the speaker always has.

[Aethereal]

This poem was just wonderful. Wonderful! It immediately inspire me to write this gift song-poem for you in in 1/0/1/0/1/0/1 meter which you may keep as your own:

Fractured

Gods of wonder, gods of might
how far may I risk my soul?
Let me stand beneath your light
so I won’t be less than whole.

[Frieda P]

Intense read, I'm not sure pleading with the any divine entity will save one's spirit from the gray. Sometimes we need to look to our own fortitude for answers within ourselves. Nicely pen'd FP.

[FlamingPhoenix]

How very true your words are dear Frieda. Thank you most kindly for your review!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Sounds like walls are coming down brick by brick. They say we learn by our mistakes. If we never put ourselves in a position to make a mistake how can we advance. Another great poem. Clive.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Good words. Thank you for your review. It shall be fun to discover at what point I walk away or ... if I can be convinced to stay...flirting with danger-- ;-)

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Nothing ventured nothing gained. When it's right, it's right. Keeping a door in the wall means you always have the option open to walk away. Besides, flirting is fun, isn't it?. Clive

[Savannah Bly]

A truly beautiful poem. Well done!

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you kindly. This is one of my favorites!

[A. Amos]

Lot of work going on in this piece and enjoyed the end with great message, great write my friend

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you!

[ron]

Allow your self a taste of this new side. Allow this change to see what it could be like. At least that is my opinion. Of course the final decision is yours but at least consider what has presented itself.

[FlamingPhoenix]

And therein lies the dilemma--have I made up my mind? I used to refer to myself as Queen Esther/Mallory Knox--I guess I just love internal conflict and the swing of a pendulum--as I strive to unite two sides of myself and find the balance within...hmm...what to do? What to do?

[ron]

Allow your self to swing slowly. Remember as the pendulum swings one way, it will surely swing back.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a little different from other writes of yours in term of form, rhythm, flow, etc. Lovely tempo and subtle rhyme.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Indeed. I guess one could state that this crystallized being has found another side of herself--one so subtle and dormant, that she could have missed it. Change can be good, yes?

[Lyn Anderson]

Change is good as long as it is in a positive direction, and this is a nice style for you, as is your other work, it is just different.