Unrelenting Desire

I want unrelenting desire to spill into me from you
The rigors of your every passion and intention to shatter me
How I could know in every touch
That you want me now,
Have always wanted me,
And this kind of desire might be forever

But I also want you to breech the ship
To get all the way to me,
To know that you want me,
But have the strength to step away
And treat me with time
And diligence
Knowing you want the way you are with me
To mean something
To matter more than someone
Who took me quickly
And discarded me

Reviews

[Alessander]

I like how this begins urgently and nearly violently, like unabashed desire.

But in the 2nd stanza, is sorta "cool down" and the ship metaphor (Isn't the navy stationed in NC?) a sorta objective appreciation as opposed to a subjective ravenous passion which devours as quickly as it materialized.

In other words, a lover who is both porn star and mathematician lol

Liked this piece. Drips with desire but also reflection.

[Relic]

I think your request is legitimate and worthy. No woman wants to be used and discarded like the pit of a devoured plum.

Nice writing.

[Maxwell Ryder]

I confess I just came the photo. Good luck in your endeavor to write.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poem. You are direct and honest. This is what poetry support to be. I hope to read more of your work. Love and friendship. Should be slow and easy.
Coyote

[Bare trees]

Your passion for fitness is leaking over into not only your desire to be loved but in the way you write. Like pushing out those last reps, you're doing the same with your pen. I admire that.

Well done.

[John the Baptist]

What I get from this one is that the speaker is a very passionate person, but not a promiscuous one. The passion must be real, not feigned in order to gain a "score." Good attitude, deserving of an appropriate partner. Good luck. Well done.