The dragon retreats, passion's flame dying down. His worthy opponents stealing his ground! Withholding his fire his power so strong. Not wanting to burn them even though they are wrong. The dragon he steps so cautiously back. His opponents deceitfully planning their attack. He lunges toward them with angered grace. Not wanting to hurt them only to keep them in place. Like a game of chess there goal is revealed. So soon it will be the dragons fate sealed. To kill a dragon and extinguish its flame. To the victors the spoils for its head mounts their shame.
*ROARS*
How dare the little fickle b******s >=(
The dragon should have killed them.... ;-;
Though if he did, I suppose this poem wouldn't have such an affect. Goodness, reading this made ME want to burn something down.
*sob*
Dude, this is heart wrenching.
Why would they want to kill something so caring?
I think that it poses a type of reflection that we all witness or have endured at one time or anothe.. read moreI think that it poses a type of reflection that we all witness or have endured at one time or another! And yes the Dragon most certainly would've taken much pleasure and satisfaction in roasting and eating their asses! Rightfully so! But then what kind of Dragon would we prefer? An evil and vengeful dragon or one that is powerful, noble and kind? I love your enthusiasm for my writing! I will try my best to keep you hungry!!!
8 Years Ago
That's exactly what I think O.o
And dude, I'm starving ;)
Sad for the dragon...by any chance are you a game of thrones fan?!! It cant be this simple...is perhaps the dragon symbolic of passion lost or destroyed because of social/family pressures?
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I've never watched the games of thrones . The Dragon is a metaphor for me being wrongfully accused o.. read moreI've never watched the games of thrones . The Dragon is a metaphor for me being wrongfully accused of things I did not do. Rather then defend myself I've simply walked awsy with my dignity dragging the ground behind me.
I enjoyed reading your poem. The pace and rhythm intensified as the fighting increased. I was hooked right from the first few words and could have kept on reading, but it ended just as swift as it began. Nice work.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much Heidi! I like the nobility, wisdom and power a dragon possess! As well as giving .. read moreThank you so much Heidi! I like the nobility, wisdom and power a dragon possess! As well as giving the reader a hint of fantasy tempered with reality! Thank you once again!!!!
*ROARS*
How dare the little fickle b******s >=(
The dragon should have killed them.... ;-;
Though if he did, I suppose this poem wouldn't have such an affect. Goodness, reading this made ME want to burn something down.
*sob*
Dude, this is heart wrenching.
Why would they want to kill something so caring?
I think that it poses a type of reflection that we all witness or have endured at one time or anothe.. read moreI think that it poses a type of reflection that we all witness or have endured at one time or another! And yes the Dragon most certainly would've taken much pleasure and satisfaction in roasting and eating their asses! Rightfully so! But then what kind of Dragon would we prefer? An evil and vengeful dragon or one that is powerful, noble and kind? I love your enthusiasm for my writing! I will try my best to keep you hungry!!!
8 Years Ago
That's exactly what I think O.o
And dude, I'm starving ;)
I really loved this dragon tale! The powerful dragon is merciful, but it costs him his life at the hands of those he spared. Tragedy. Very poetic indeed.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much! I'm just writing what I feel and trying to convey it so that others might be able.. read moreThank you so much! I'm just writing what I feel and trying to convey it so that others might be able to identify with or experience the same feelings. Thank you once again
I really like this a lot. The character of the dragon was honorable and that was cool. You need to edit one little thing...The word there should be "their" in the line "their goal is revealed" It is just a quick and easy edit.
Thank you for sharing
Annie
Just wanted to thank you for the advice and kind words. I've not put a pen to paper in so long and a.. read moreJust wanted to thank you for the advice and kind words. I've not put a pen to paper in so long and a little behind on auto correct! LOL
8 Years Ago
I sometimes hate the autocorrect. I also easily make errors in mine. I have had things pointed out o.. read moreI sometimes hate the autocorrect. I also easily make errors in mine. I have had things pointed out on my wordpress blog that I had to back and edit. Once it was in the title itself and I felt really dumb about that one LOL
I do like your writing. If it makes you feel good then you should do it when it is not stressful. It is hard to keep up with everything to survive these days.
Annie
8 Years Ago
Thank you Annie! You are so generous with your compliments! I find myself skipping through the diffe.. read moreThank you Annie! You are so generous with your compliments! I find myself skipping through the different genres of all the writers. There is so much talent within so many writers. I feel very humbled that mine are even read. Thank you.
I must confess it's hard for me to want to read unless it's a manual or a technical jargon of some sort even blueprints so to speak. Every now and then something grabs me though and I just can't read .. more..