Never Again

Never Again

 

Time and time again I gave you my all,

And time and time again you let me fall.

 

I gave you my heart and you left me in the dark.

 

Why did I let you hurt me so?

How could I not have known?

 

You love me, then leave me.

You want me, then ignore me.

 

Never again will I fall for you.

You made me feel so used...

 

I will never let you into my life again,

My love for you came and went.

 

I gave you your chances.

You gave me your answers.

 

You let me down and now you'll never get me back.

My next love will make up for the things you lack.

 

He'll make me feel loved.

He'll show me he cares.

I'll forget the times we shared.

 

You'll be just a memory,

Nothing more then a hazey dream.

 

Author's Note

This is mostly just venting. I hope you enjoy it.

Reviews

[M. Amphet Salt]

Warning: I Give Reviews, not praise.

As you state, "This is mostly just venting," becomes obvious after the line: "I will never let you into my life again." Before hand it would feel you're asking for sympathy from the reader and from who this was inspire from. However, the last stanza leaves me to feel that deep down you will always have feeling for him/her.

Theme: Anger/release from being in an emotionally neglectful relationship.

Form: Is choppy and actually needs to be worked on because it takes away from the emotional state I believe you're trying to convey. You go from blank verse to free verse. You should choose one and stay with it to make it more sound and punctual. However, there is a chaotic feel to it; which is great because it shows the emotional rollercoaster of how those teenage relationships go. You do this by couplet/quatrain stanzas.

You do have some alliteration and consonance in some of the word choice that allows the poem to smooth out with feeling and understanding. Otherwise it lacks other conventional figures of speech; metaphor, simile, imagery.

Best lines: “I gave you your chances.
You gave me your answers.”

Need a comma between: You want me then ignore me.

Nice show of feeling and emotion.

H. D. Sharpe

[Felicity Winter]

I really like this you did a wonderful job.