Did you care?

       you said you loved us,

                              you said you cared.

                      even when you let him touch me,

                               and didn't care.

                          you said you loved us,

                   but then you loved him more.

                    so we vanished into thin air,

               no mother to care no father to help,

               12 years old and sent to the street,

            just so you could have the love of a man,

                         you thought you had.

                    now you are the one alone,

                  and I can make it on my own.

 

Reviews

[United Writings]

FireAngel42029

I personally think that this wirte shows alot of boldness. This poem does need a little more detail bringing your parents back in the poem later on to show that you took care of yourself better then they could or did.Through hard times your mother could give away what she had and aparently loved deeply for your children which is wrong so i can understand where your coming from even though i have not gone through myself i can feel the pain with no pitty from the mother.reat write i hope you will concider my suggestions if not whatever.
Thanks for this look into your past.

Promisekeeper

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wow thats amazing and horrifying. I think its great bur I think it could use a bit more description but all in all and its a wonderful poem I just would like to read more of it. Good write overall.

[Ralphy]

A wonderful poem with a knockout message. The message is so clear and I agree with the other reader, it's a bold move�Thank you for the read�

[chris' girlfriend]

wow that poem made me feel so sad :(
but it is such an amazing poem!!!!
♥

[Moalix]

Wow, this poem I can definately relate to. It is written well, too. I was abused by my father and my mom blew me off in some ways. It's nice and also hurts to know that other people have gone though that pain.

[lonely poet]

wow.. so beautiful..
sure i care soo..