Weeping roots

Shortened my words spit upon me the acid hatred, forcing a broken rhythm upon me.

Delicate aroma: a spice-merchant's daughter,
curled at the foot
of night's secrets
she holds a shame.
Runs, through forests,
thorns entwining within her;
merging to sharpened shards of resentment
pushing through her blood.
Her solace is in this isolation,
inner peace sought for under
our languid branches.
Night falls and
moon-called she flees,
back to the sinner's arms.
O spice-merchant's daughter;
my roots weep for you.

Reviews

[JelliFyshKissUs]

She runs because there is no peace to be found in her home... within herself... in another. She has been torn asunder by the world... by her own faulty thinking... and tries to find solace where solace does not exist: in solitude and in a habitual sinner. She is truly frail... a delicate aroma.. but continues to be handled by callous hands. Your roots are sensitive to her plight. Firm in the soil of genuine compassion that a soul like her needs to take under. Beautiful flow and phrases that make my heart rend for her. Your ability is uncomparable.

[Tkess]

An abusive relationship seen through the eyes of a friend of the abused who is unable to do anything but watch; like a tree rooted in ground. Great poem.

[.n.]

I love this- a complete story told from the perspective of a tree. Wonderful. You have great imagery and your word choices perfectly complement the characters giving a real sense of who/what they are in such a short space. My favorite lines are "Runs, through forests thorns entwining within her" because her inner emotion mirrors the outer situation. Lovely

[Emily B]

a master work

[Ruth]

So wonderfully written, in awe!
This is beautifully woven..powerfully so!
xx

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the motion is beautifully poured~ you bring sensations through vividly~ from sound to the capture of emotion~here soars a scene caught from embroidered undreams~

[trainwreck]

This cut deep. The only grammar mistake I notices was three lines before the last: "sinners" should be "sinner's". anyway, this was a well crafted work, that is both haunting and real. Great work!

[_mal]

Pretty and sad. The length of this is perfect, no wasted words. Each one is important. Makes you think