The autumn scar

The autumn scar

A Story by Jess
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A young man has magical powers and the townspeople don't like him because he is different. They treat him badly so he stays in a tower until this young lovely lady helps him.

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He wasn't an ordinary fella. He had long, dark raggedy hair. Had clothes that were midnight blue. Didn't say a word to anyone in the village below. Somehow he has a scar on his face. Nobody knows how it got there, nobody has ever seen it yet they have heard of it. They say a long time ago people would hurt certain people that seemed different. The village people aren't sure if it's true but it's why they have heard. The people from before had come across this man who wasnt like any other they decided to torture him until the scar had stayed forever. Not only had it stayed but everyone named it the Autumn Scar. Only because it comes back every autumn. But the secret is, how does it go away in order for it to come back each fall. Hmmm.... Something to think about. But for now let's hear about the dark mysterious mans life before all this happened to him and we will later hear about how the scar came upon him.

© 2014 Jess


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Yes but there is some stuff I left out in there that nobody's knows yet. Which would be stuff sorta towards the end.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hi, I read this and I read your comment where you say that this is what you are considering using as your prologue and then having chapter one start out telling the story of his life. While that is a fine approach, I would just suggest nixing the prologue all together. If you are already going to start telling his story at the beginning, you don't really need a prologue that serves no other function but to reveal key plot points well before their time. By the time your readers get to certain points in the story they will already know what is going to happen, killing off their suspense, and also they might get bored, because you have essentially revealed your entire plot line in the first few sentences. That's just my opinion though. Best of luck to you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


It's not my full story. I'm actually working on it right now. That would be like the prologue I guess and then I'll start chapter 1 explaining how his life was before everything and so on and so forth

Posted 10 Years Ago


is that your full story.....I think it's not. platform is very very good, you must be think a lot more. good pen by the way.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Jess
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