Red Roses

I tried to see where I could add who I collaborate with. Name is Billy

My red, red rose,

My heart beats uncontrollably.
It's hard for me to stay composed,
Waiting to show you all of me.

So I sit here watching sun rise,
Albeit slowly. It's shy, I surmise;
Either that or there's too much cloud!
Maybe it's a little early, like,
Like your desire -
Takin' far too long to catch fire.

But I come to you with delicate care,
Spreading my petals like sweet perfume.
Watch as I flourish and never presume,
Just follow the scent that fills the room.

It follows a challenge my red red rose,
That our passion may grow and grow.
It needn't be a fragile thing,
To understand what love can bring

Author's Note

Honest feedback please

Reviews

[Abhilash Hegde]

Great job, Fia. I loved reading it right from start to the end - My red, red rose, many feelings arose, it ain't a faint heart to challenge, there is desire with passion to avenge! This is pure poetry in flow, the rhyme, meter and the muse, everything comes along beautifully well. It's delicate in touch, so enticing to read line by line, I could feel the emotions and all of the more. These lines weave a magic for me.
"Maybe it's a little early, like,
Like your desire -
Takin' far too long to catch fire."
Wonderfully done! Thanks for sharing.

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you so much for the review. I appreciate it.

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful work. Powerful.

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you Thomas, appreciate your comments

[Relic]

The allure of a woman can be a strong one if a man is receptive and wise enough to know the right one in his midst.

Well done, Fia. :)

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you Relic