Musing

3 words

Isn't it funny how three words would elicit intense emotions?

I Love you
You feel it in your chest
You feel warmth
You feel a glow

I Want you
You feel it lower
You feel heat
You feel an intense desire.

I Hate you
You feel it everywhere
Like a whip
It aches

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I don't know what to feel about this poem to be honest. The first line is a great intro (it's *elicit, though, "illicit" means "unlawful"), then Love and Want are beautiful while Hate feels too abrupt. Maybe that was the point; maybe, then it's the gravitas it should exude and its position at the end that kind of don't complement each other? What's good and necessary is in order to really do justice to the concept of how three words affect the receiving entity, brevity is the way to go. And Love and Want flow really well. Hate on the other hand, apart from the whip and partly from "aches" it doesn't feel as punchy when reading it as an ending, though ending on Hate is a master stroke. Maybe I'm reading too much into this and need a little to mull it over, but I did enjoy this concept. Absolutely. Well done overall.

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you for pointing out the spelling error. I do not feel that your interpretation is wrong. Maybe it is too abrupt. I wrote it down as it came. thank you emipoemi

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Amy R]

A very brief poem but full of truth..
I like the first and 2nd stanza. The last is true but dang its hurts if someone tells you that...

Nice poem
-Amy

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you for reading

[Soren]

Words have power and inflict emotions that cause wars, bring peace, tart relationships and end them. Nicely written

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you for reading and commenting Soren.

[Relic]

All true. I'll take the first and second over the third any day. :)

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you for reading and commenting relic

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. Truly felt.

[Fia Naturie]

Thank you for the nice comment. appreciate it