Perfect Picture

...when it's 'perfect'....

You have such small,

Gentle hands.

The softest of touch;

As you trace invisible lines

Across my temples

And relaxed brow.

 

You stare into me,

I’d left windows open

Secretly hoping

That you’d brave

My weak defenses

And seek me out.

 

Inside, you comfort me

More than the fire

I had waiting for you.

You incise my soul

Drawing no blood,

Caressing open nerve.

 

Your skill of navigation

Within me:

I sense that you have been

Here�"before.

Perhaps in a Time

When Dreams lived, flourished.

 

So petite in size�"

Yet my own passion

Enwraps you and

I feel and breathe

Your every selfless,

Deliberate move.

 

My eyes, weary

And guilty of your entrance.

They complied when

Words failed to shield

From an intruder

Of Need and Desire.

 

I shall keep you

Safe, here.

Should you peer out my chest

You will see

The palm of my hand,

Guarding you in.

So fitting you are.

I am intoxicated and

Delirious with the liquids

We are now sharing.

I feel our flesh grafting,

As it always belonged.

 

I close my eyes,

While you settle in

Your forever home.

I will sleep now, dream

That you someday may be,

More than a photograph.

Reviews

[Inner Rain]

So touching! Wonderful write!

"Inside, you comfort me
More than the fire
I had waiting for you.
You incise my soul
Drawing no blood,
Caressing open nerve."

I like the imagery here, descriptive at the same time cryptic. I also like the way you ended the poem.

"I close my eyes,
While you settle in
Your forever home.
I will sleep now, dream
That you someday may be,
More than a photograph."

The stanza give it a dreamy touch. Good work! :D

[M.Babu]

This is an extremely wonderful poem. The flow is ultra steamlined and the words convey unimaginable sentiment. Perfect...absolutely stunning

[Caitlynxoxo]

I'd hate to be repetative (since all the other reviews have been about the beauty of this poem) but that's because it honestly is beautiful. The message behind the words, as per usual in your peoms, astound me. It's like you were born to write, and you certainly satisfy your readers :) Absolutely wonderful poem. It read like a dream.

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Charles]

Quite intense... especially in reference to a photograph. Good images for the subject matter and a nice lead into the twist at the end (the photograph). I'm not sure I understand the " after the word size in stanza # 5. Otherwise, a relatively tight poem done with a flair.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Such a Beautiful write! Love is such a strong emotion!

[Valentine]

A wonderful write, your word usage is so tender and good..lol and God bless..Valentine

[KAREN]

Beautiful, but has a sense of loneliness to it.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Your poem is so full of love... yes, it does sound perfect.
You wrote this with eloquence and there is a quietness to it .. just lovely.
A safe and beautiful feeling when reading this. Perhaps more than a photograph.
Wonderful poetry.

Chloe

[Norma M Sutton]

I like the quietness of this.

[littlelilypurplebride]

very lovely & beautiful very creative. god bless lily