Granite Man

a piece of self-admission

Standing, edge of cliff so sheer

Peering toward the vast

Churning blue, and foam recede

Lessons, of the past.

Project my soul, this vertical wall

That shields the tender land

From erosion of the Tempest Wind

Yet carves the Granite man. 

Beneath, as passions tremble

And curl about the form

Slowly abrade patina-soft

In forecast of the storm.

Adjacent to these weathered friends

Lie memories of the gale,

When weakness overcame me�"

Another love, I failed.

Resting bitter, jagged, waiting

To rest my skin upon�"

Accepting vengeance’ laceration,

Exposed--within each dawn.

 

I, spun in ego�"unyielding�"

Deny the right to view,

The fissures gape internally

Kept away from you.

Igneous veneered viscera�"

With pulse upon command�"

And words that knew such timelessness

As footprints in the sand.

Yet vertical and tall I’ll reach

Defy natural decay�"

Deeming that my wit prevails

With death I may persuade.

In Time, such shroud consumes me

I will have died before�"

Legacies of ignorance�"

I’ve offered nothing more.

Granite man is born of fire;

And this, his only sin:

Striking flint and flesh as one,

Igniting from within.

Reviews

[Sarah McConnaughey]

Very creative and it flows so well. Another great poem. :)

[KAREN]

Flows with feelings and emotions! Excecellent read and write!

[just rose.]

very byronesque

[Dizzy]

Wow. That was beautiful to read. I drank in every line. This is an amazing poem.

[Lilly]

An incredible write... Lovely images in this also...
A very strong poem and it is penned wonderfully

[Rikkevi Rue]

my measure of a poem is threefold:
1. how does it rhyme and flow, and roll around on the tongue
2. how creative and original are the metaphors
3. how much depth does it command, does it stir one to higher contemplation, does it spark a curiosity within, are there deeper meanings which are revealed to one when newly read.
This poem rates at the top in all categories. It is in fact brilliant and a rare gem.

[Bethany]

This is a gorgeously intense piece, it requires a lot of concentration to follow which I tend to really like- although no poem can handle much ambiguity. It is just so beautifully written that each line flows incredibly well into the next with such grace that I believe anyone would enjoy it no matter whether they understood it or not.
You have incredible talent!

[Dark Empress]

I like it, very creative. Great write :)

[Ladysue]

this starts off very strong and continues through. This is very creative with great imagery...the last six lines or so are especially good. Very deep and complex...Great title too. good writing...

[Charles]

A complex bit of 'self-admission' There are some rather powerful images here; I especially like the last few lines. I can't quite follow all the changes in the tense of the verbs and don't understand the ubiquitous ".