Granite Man

a piece of self-admission

Standing, edge of cliff so sheer

Peering toward the vast

Churning blue, and foam recede

Lessons, of the past.

Project my soul, this vertical wall

That shields the tender land

From erosion of the Tempest Wind

Yet carves the Granite man. 

Beneath, as passions tremble

And curl about the form

Slowly abrade patina-soft

In forecast of the storm.

Adjacent to these weathered friends

Lie memories of the gale,

When weakness overcame me�"

Another love, I failed.

Resting bitter, jagged, waiting

To rest my skin upon�"

Accepting vengeance’ laceration,

Exposed--within each dawn.

 

I, spun in ego�"unyielding�"

Deny the right to view,

The fissures gape internally

Kept away from you.

Igneous veneered viscera�"

With pulse upon command�"

And words that knew such timelessness

As footprints in the sand.

Yet vertical and tall I’ll reach

Defy natural decay�"

Deeming that my wit prevails

With death I may persuade.

In Time, such shroud consumes me

I will have died before�"

Legacies of ignorance�"

I’ve offered nothing more.

Granite man is born of fire;

And this, his only sin:

Striking flint and flesh as one,

Igniting from within.

Reviews

[AlieahRose]

THIS PEICE GAVE ME CHILLS...
SUCH AN EXCEPTIONAL PEICE...
I FELT LIKE I WAS THERE...
AMAZING JOB ON THIS...

[G. K. Bostic]

Reading the poetry of someone with your talent makes me question how I dare to call my self a poet. As a writer of rhymes, verse, and prose, I applaud you as a true poet. This is worth many reads just to soak in the metaphor. Also loved "...words that knew such timelessness/ As footprints in the sand"
Great work here!

[sarah]

this is super powerful holds such an deepness!

[The Analog Kid]

This is really a fine poem. Rhyme is woven throughout and flows wonderfully. Looking forward to reading more of your work. It's nice to see another real poet on this site!

[Cassandra D.]

This was quite beautiful; it left me speechless.
But now, all i can say, is well done.
This was a remarkable poem!

[kaylynnmelody♥]

You left me speechless! thanks for a great read!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Awesome write with great imagery!

[InkSlinger]

Your brilliance is shining brightly... Super piece of work that flows smoothly, full of imagery, and visually intense.. I loved it..

[vido.]

i adore the title and all the words that follow. the entire metaphorical aspect is genius. well done.

[Lydia Blackwell]

Wow. this is very good. i like the metaphor of the granite man. To me, this talks about how tough times shape a person to become who they are. So, without these "storms and hardships", we can not achieve greatness. Each time we fail- it is a lesson learned. Lovely job with this unique concept.