Granite Man

a piece of self-admission

Standing, edge of cliff so sheer

Peering toward the vast

Churning blue, and foam recede

Lessons, of the past.

Project my soul, this vertical wall

That shields the tender land

From erosion of the Tempest Wind

Yet carves the Granite man. 

Beneath, as passions tremble

And curl about the form

Slowly abrade patina-soft

In forecast of the storm.

Adjacent to these weathered friends

Lie memories of the gale,

When weakness overcame me�"

Another love, I failed.

Resting bitter, jagged, waiting

To rest my skin upon�"

Accepting vengeance’ laceration,

Exposed--within each dawn.

 

I, spun in ego�"unyielding�"

Deny the right to view,

The fissures gape internally

Kept away from you.

Igneous veneered viscera�"

With pulse upon command�"

And words that knew such timelessness

As footprints in the sand.

Yet vertical and tall I’ll reach

Defy natural decay�"

Deeming that my wit prevails

With death I may persuade.

In Time, such shroud consumes me

I will have died before�"

Legacies of ignorance�"

I’ve offered nothing more.

Granite man is born of fire;

And this, his only sin:

Striking flint and flesh as one,

Igniting from within.

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Brilliant finale! Love the reference to rocks throughout - striking. Thanks to Tate Morgan for sharing this with me. Cheers!
Light,
Siddartha

[bonbon7810]

I liked it a lot. It is well written and I like the vocabulary you use to describe everything!

[Revolutionary]

very well written with all the strat of a great poem.Metaphore conflict final resolution I love this poem and will add it to my share list

[Anatomical Grip]

this is an awesome poem. great writing and very thoughtful

[Dressed in Poetry]

This is a great poem. The words and flow are wonderful. The only suggestion that I have is to read through this one more time and make sure the commas are in the place that you want them. Some of them seem out of place and I think you might catch that with another careful read-through.

[Adam :P]

well written. good good read.

[Kate Hunter]

nice job. Very well written. Very strong word usage.

[JulieNorell]

Great job! Very good read!

[Julie Beth]

this was a great read great job :)

[msharma]

Awesome experience penned down.