Dry-Fire

A difficult place for a woman to be.

She sits, emotionally bland,
Speaking mechanically;
Her right jaw, slightly misaligned,
From calcifications of former fractures;
And he is left-handed.
Lime-green circles about her
Distant, blue eyes indicate
That she has pleased him
This past week.
She believes that she
Is Improving, is better;
As the distance between
The necessary corrections
Is elongating, and she doesn’t
Nap as often.
He seems to love her more;
And frequently resorts
To audible amendments,
Or is too fatigued, himself,
To properly intervene
In her enlightenment.

She inhales, fidgets, re-adjusts,
To breathe without pain;
Calmly expressing accolades for
The strength, perseverance,
Of her son who doesn’t fail;
But weeps, in anonymity,
For her daughter who must
Have inherited her propensity
Toward weakness, malfunction.
Perhaps, over time,
He will see fit to guide
Their daughter with
Identical acts of love;
And she will be well.

She stares out the window,
Toward the windswept willow;
Catatonic, citing that
Past years, learning years,
Were resonating like the
Dry-fire echo of the
Empty Chamber in a game
Of Russian-Roulette.
The sound, repeated and
Sustained in dull memory;
The clicks that fed
The ugly tomorrows;
But her eyes sparkle as
She admits to a yearning,
For the strike of the pin
To fresh primer;
And she may only regret
That she will not hear
The Sound
Heralding her freedom.

Author's Note

Copyright 2010, Fegger

Reviews

[Lilly]

Powerful and emotional - love the detail of this piece...

[Dark Empress]

I love the detail. It's an amazing write. You did a wonderful job. It kept my attention from beginning to end.

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem is detailed. It is profound thoughts from a woman who is about to do what she must to gain safety and freedom. the last stanza makes it quite clear what is going to happen and the poem is done in a calm manner that lets you know the narrator of the story has thought about the actions to come.

[Charles]

Good writing... at the risk of making it sound like a pun, I'd say right on target. The subject's state of mind is quite clear and presented to the reader with some good images. :-)

[George Love]

Very good, deep thoughts, emotion filled work.

[Bridget Mcmaken]

wow very deep and amazing work! I love this!

[Fegger]

Thank you, Alicia. I'm happy that you were moved by the drama of this reality; and one I'd wished would be more fictional.

[Alicia Schroeder]

THis is a deep write of emotion, Awesome peice