A Blind Man's Dream

              I

I hold you in my arms

Hoping this miracle will endure,

In the distance 

The ocean blushes

The sun kissing its shore.

This moment is so fragile

I am almost afraid,

I could lose you in a breath

In my heart's serenade.

Give me a moment to share

Beyond prayers and memory;

Lend that hand, lay that whisper,

Let me know you hear.

But this emptiness is real,

Sheltered in a reminiscence,

Searching in cavernous darkness 

For its lost happiness.

I am losing this moment,

That I thought was forever,

The dreams once eternal, now elusive

My soul in a shiver.

The angels prepare the heavens,

To write our history in the stars,

The moon their overseer,

As they etch away our scars.

The cold waves are unfolding,

Kissing my feet, dissolving my ground,

Beckoning me close,

With their alluring sound.

If I stayed, could I dare hope

For a miracle of love?

If I let go, would you know

I still love you so?

II

These broken wings of love

Aimlessly wandering

On this path between

The dead and the living.

I haunt these shores

As they once haunted me,

My life now forever

But still searching for thee.

You remain eclipsed,

A shadow of my dream, 

I still hear your laughter

Cadence with the stream.

It is a cruel reality

Or perhaps there is none,

You are just my imagination

That cannot be undone.

The echoes of a bleeding heart,

Unheard and unseen.

Until transitions still beyond

You will remain... 

A blind man's dream.

Author's Note

What do you think of choice of words and the flow? Does the poem seem to center around an idea? Also, comment on the structure of the poem.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...In my library...:).......................

[FeatherOwl]

Thank you for your review....With your penchant of words (I read some of your work) I appreciate your using the word, "splendid" :))

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)............

[SOUL LESS]

The flow is nice, except for a few jarring moments. It was a beautiful read, but as to the structure, I'm not sure I'm qualified to comment.

But great write, yeah!

[FeatherOwl]

Thank you for your review.....It began as a poem in search of someone, at the end of part I the narrator contemplates dying to be able to find what he is searching for, in part II he dies and doesn't yet find what he is searching for. I was wondering if this underlying story is readable....
I'm glad you liked it!

[SOUL LESS]

It is readable, If it is not, it's the reader's own fault - they are too shallow. You know how literature works, you could write simply anything and critics will pull out hidden meanings you never even thought of. So, yeah, it can mean whatever you want it to mean.

This poem is awesome.